Bagging up the rubbish

A shortie straight off head

Bagging up the rubbish!

A messy room,

disorganised, confused.

Nothing where it should be-

a desire to change!

A need to rearrange,

bag up the rubbish,

tie the bag tight!

No chance for the rubbish

to creep back in through the night.

I sleep in peace - a sense of release;

a mind free of stress, now I've let

go of the mess.

Author's Note

make of it what you will ;) all comments and criticisms welcome

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

Okay now this one fits perfectly... A room which was completely full of dust and rubbish, everything was out of order and that ugly view of the room made the poet feel unsettled so she cleaned up everything and put the rubbish and unnecessary things on garbage bag.... This brings back the serenity of the room and it finally makes the poet feel happy.... This is quite relatable to our daily life.... I loved the flow and structure of the poem and I really enjoyed your "shortie straight off head" poem....

I can relate to it with modern human life too, nowadays we mostly focus on the unnecessary rubbish things and bring tension in our mind, but when we clear that after getting inspired that makes our life easier

Regards
Dhiman

[hcarson]

Spot on Dhiman, it was exactly what i was thinking. Thank you for reading and you positive review, much appreciated as always :)

[Robert Haigh]

A fun write, with a serious side to it too. We all have to clear out the rubbish from time to time - not just from our room, but from our mind also!

[hcarson]

Yep...you had this one spot on robert, mental rubbish is succh a nightmare lol thank u for you comment,. Much appreciated

[Leadfoot Callahan]

Short and to the point. Evocative. Good job!

[hcarson]

thank you so much leadfooot, your comment is much appreciated :)

[Shannon]

I really enjoyed this piece. Both light and serious. Tying the bag tight so that trash does not come back.... Brilliant.

[hcarson]

Thank you..my partner cleared out a long forgotton cupboard..must have inspired me with the amount of rubbish we found lol! Thank you you for reading and lovely comment :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if you ever get a chance, maybe read Elizabeth Ames' Essay "on being a mess"---

my classes and i do that one...similar theme as here...we get a few nights of peace but then another mess finds its way in...like it is some living thing that won't accept no for an answer.

[hcarson]

thank you jacob, i will most certainly look at that and you are so right, we have to grab our peace free nights and make the most of them they never stick around long enough! thank you so much for reading

[Bacchus]

To purge something is so freeing isn't it?
I'd love if you would have described some of the things that got
put in that bag and it was longer. :)
But it does make me want to go purge somethings myself!

[hcarson]

aha, thank you bacchus..i think i may revisit this and do as you suggest, i thhink it would definitely add something to it! thank you for your comments and for giving me another idea! :)