Onomatophobia

A challenge between myself and inject positivity to use two obscure words in any form of writing..this is my attempt :)

Onomatophobia

I have a funny fear;

a word I can not bare to hear.

Onomatophobia, some may say..

this word is DEATH.

I cringe, shrink away

from this difficult word

that I hold at bay.

I could explain why I fear it

but the explanation is far 

too lengthy, 

instead I turn my ears and 

head away

when I feel the conversation is 

going that way.

I need to commit verbicide

upon this particular word.

Banish from it its meaning

and learn to listen to it with 

ease once more..

Author's Note

please ignore the structure..i know it is all over the place, i intend on coming back and fixing it at some point

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your premise is unusual & well-stated. Your word "onomatophobia" sent me to google it & then I saw how your fear-word is "death" . . . which makes sense. The part I don't like so much is that you bring up a topic here, then you say there's too much to explain. That's the purpose of writing. We explain. If you don't want to explain, then don't bring it up. We want to know. Don't leave us hanging with this partial-story. I do like your ending, tho. It helps make up for the idea that you bring up something you don't want to take the time to explain.

[hcarson]

Aha..could do it in two parts maybe with a bit more explanation maybe..this was kind of a rush job to be honest as i haven't been able to do any writing etc recently so kind of grabbed snd uploaded while i had time and didn't forget or get distracted haha. I see what you mean about the explanation but it was more about the word rather than why but yea..it could be expanded upon and make about bout really. Thanks for reading and suggestions, always appreciated :)

[barleygirl]

Thanks for understanding my idiosyncrasies . . . if I'm taking my time to read you, I want you to take the time to put your all into it *smile*

[hcarson]

i always give it my all..it just doesn't necessarily go the way my head tells it too haha..i'm still very much a learner so i appreciate i make many mistakes but i'm learnng slowely but surely and enjoying to journey..regardless where some end up :)..i always love and appreciate help and advice as naturally i want to improve and move forward..feeling i'm very much stagnating at the moment unfortunately :)

[barleygirl]

I don't know enuf about you to make a comment on your "stagnation" . . . but it did occur to me that maybe being chronically in a hurry could be stunting growth. I spent most of my life packing in too much & never being able to do anything to the best of my ability becuz I was in a hurry. Sometimes we need to have the courage to say "no" & carve out time for our priorities? Just a thought . . . (((HUGS)))

[hcarson]

it is a bit awkward at the moment as it is still the holidays here so with 5 kids plus a load of college work etc it is a little busy but i'm planning on ttrying to get some time for myself and take more time on things..see what happens..could get interesting haha!! :)

[barleygirl]

Well, with 5 kids, you don't get the luxury of carving out time for yourself *sigh!* . . .

[hcarson]

i will...some how lol...although to be fair i'm really lucky..my kids are generally well behaved, settle well at night as most of them are older, they aren't any hassle really..the fault lays with me entirely not organizing my time properly and looking for excuses haha ;)

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I love the "I need to commit verbicide on this particular word"! haha clever. The whole poem great and I enjoyed the unique verbage :)

[hcarson]

thank you so much lynn, i'm glad you liked it and i really appreciate your comments :)

[V]

I even know this word. ^^
I think you did well including the words. A nice free verse poem on the topic.
My fav lines are: "I need to commit verbicide upon this particular word", really well-crafted. I think I've read a lot of improvement in your works lately. :)

[V]

Oh one more thing about your structure complaint: I think it needs a tad of revise but not much. It reads ok. Besides, structure can never be ignored as it is essential for writing and reading (for the readers, the way you structure a write leads the reader while reading like periods or commas cause pauses or paragraphs point out the beginning of another part or a twist whatever etc ...)

[hcarson]

My intention with this one was to come back and sort structure at a later date, only uploaded it mainly so i didnt lose it haha..so many pads etc..im glad you liked it, ..kind of different isnt for me isnt it..having fun trying these words..thanks for reading and your advice, appreciated as always :)

[V]

Yeah I had fun trying out words too. I like to see differences in writings. ;)

[hcarson]

It is fun, helps me focus a bit even if the result isn't great or whatever at least it is something so that helps me feel better that i'm getting somewhere. The one you did with all the words i thought was amazing...not quite ready for that myself just yet though, will enjoy trying to get there, all part of the fun :)

[V]

Thanks again. I can only repeat; read&write...you'll improve after a while.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

but our feelings about this subject are often all over the place...so the structure makes sense, because death often doesn't...

I like, "verbicide" and would give the speaker, not guilty by reason of justifiable verbicide!

[hcarson]

Aha, good point about the structure..wish i had thought of that haha!! Thank you so much for your review, much appreciated :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if you ever have a mind to, would love a visit from you....

j.

[hcarson]

absolutely, i enjoy your works, will go now :)

[The Calm Scribe]

A great poem, I love it's depth and meaning. If I could give a few points; cringe needs an e, as well I would consider changing I turn my head and ears away to I turn my ears and head away. It is small but I feel it may help the flow if the piece.

[hcarson]

thank you yes i agree with what you say, i will change it that, thank you again for you words :)

[The Calm Scribe]

No problem, we writers have to stick together. lol

[Shannon]

LOL. I think he will have trouble topping you!
The last phrase, would "Banish from it its meaning..." feel more fluid?

[hcarson]

It would, i will change that..seems obvious when it gets pointed out to you doesnt it...have you done yours yet :)

[Shannon]

That's why we help each other. Because different eyes, all that.
No I haven't started. Got invite late in evening. Did NOT want to engage brain that fully. Are you good with me joining?

[Shannon]

Oh my. You just hit something so exact for me. I love words. I know weird. Don't care. Enjoy learning, finding exact right one, playing with them!

[hcarson]

I have wrote some down will message them through to you