Much could be interpreted by your words, but I thought I felt death drawing near as a result of some great loss, some person who literally was the light in your life, as per this piece ... That could be my negative attitude, but I did enjoy misinterpreting your heart penned to page, if that should prove to be the case ...
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8 Years Ago
thanks for reading and reviewing marv, much appreciation, no misinterpretation as such, your along c.. read morethanks for reading and reviewing marv, much appreciation, no misinterpretation as such, your along correct lines :)
I really love this. Normally, I like more detail, painting vivid word pictures. But this one is satisfyingly vague . . . leaving it open to interpretation . . . clear about the physical sensations being described (very palpable) but not specific about what causes this, so the reader can inject his/her own scenario. For me, what brings on this type of breathless resignation is the realization that people (or some one person) isn't or hasn't been all that we thought they were.
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8 Years Ago
yea your could say you are right on that one :) thanks for reading and reviewing, i'm glad you liked.. read moreyea your could say you are right on that one :) thanks for reading and reviewing, i'm glad you liked it :)
Nice imagery you have presented through your words, loved the flow and word choice... This is such an amazing work, with lots of thoughts presented by the poet, looks like she has been facing lot of chaos throughout the day but finally finds peace both physically and mentally.... Whoa!!!! Great to see you with new works my dear frnd... Love love love it.... Full ratings....
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8 Years Ago
thamk you IP :) it certainly helped with the site you pointed me to, helped get me thinking again so.. read morethamk you IP :) it certainly helped with the site you pointed me to, helped get me thinking again so i'm really grateful to you, you are a star :) thank you for the lovely review, as always much appreciated :)
8 Years Ago
Awe please don't say like that, I'm so happy to hear that my little knowledge of a source helped you.. read moreAwe please don't say like that, I'm so happy to hear that my little knowledge of a source helped you this much, always here for you, it puts the biggest smile on my face seeing you happy and doing what you love doing... You are always welcome with all my heart....
8 Years Ago
my next plan is to try and do one of those heikus thingies lol, thanks for all your help :)
Wow!!! I know you will ace it don't worry... Will keep an eye on your page.. By the way I reviewed t.. read moreWow!!! I know you will ace it don't worry... Will keep an eye on your page.. By the way I reviewed this piece yesterday but saw today that nothing on my review... Lol.. But it gave me an opportunity to talk to you.... So it's totally worth full....
8 Years Ago
i'm always here to chat IP if ever you just want to pass the time just send a message, i'm always ba.. read morei'm always here to chat IP if ever you just want to pass the time just send a message, i'm always back an for even if i'm not writing :
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Thank you dear frnd... I know I have people like you to encourage me and help me anytime...
It is painful.Yes it is short but do not need any extra care .As it comes directly from the crevasse of soul and it is reflected everywhere.
True, why we all gather at the same painful turn of life? I can relate with it.Beautiful!!
Thanks for sharing.
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8 Years Ago
Thank you mou, i'm glad you liked it, your comments appreciated :)
Its definitely powerful, even though this seems like something that was created at a random state of mind. I think the structure is still wonderful i can see the imagery used here, "darkness swallowing slowly" kind of feeling. I liked it very much it seems like this a break from your usual style Ms.H, i really like the breaking of boundaries you've done here.
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8 Years Ago
thank you sangeetha, it is different to my normal style..it all depends what mood i'm in what style .. read morethank you sangeetha, it is different to my normal style..it all depends what mood i'm in what style comes out really as i don't tend to follow a particular structure if i can help it..it's too limiting thank you for your lovely review, always appreciated :)
8 Years Ago
Aww no problem ms.H you know I'm a sucker for your stuff ;D
I really like this. I am really concrete, so if I missed the point entirely, a apologize. Should the last line be "...never the same..." or "it will ever..."?
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8 Years Ago
ahh i hadn't noticed that..it is meant to be never...eyes are very deceitful to your own work... i w.. read moreahh i hadn't noticed that..it is meant to be never...eyes are very deceitful to your own work... i will change that immediately :) thanks for your comments and pointing that out, much apprecuated :)
That's such a good one. At times when we feel most troubled or struggling with anything, we come up with the best writes.
It reads so much more calmed and thought over than other poems by you regarding structure, use of words and flow. I like its tone, the dark atmosphere - it is a somewhat gloomy write but in a quiet and serene atmosphere.
Free Verse suits you ^^
Your best poem, I'd say. Well done.
Thank you :)...i bern struggling badly recently..wasn't sure about this one but thought what the hec.. read moreThank you :)...i bern struggling badly recently..wasn't sure about this one but thought what the heck lol. Thanks for your comments, much appreciated :)
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You're welcome. I'm sorry you had to struggle with something. I hope you're better or at least get t.. read moreYou're welcome. I'm sorry you had to struggle with something. I hope you're better or at least get to be.
Love it! Really nice pace and flow. The enjambment works really well and kept me reading and entertained. It's also very sensory, which works really well too! I loooove sensory language, it's so powerful and leaves such a real impression on your audience. Your words leave an honest sense of emotion too. It's short, but powerful.
I usually don't like poetry, but I think you've done a great job!
Can't wait to read more of your work :)
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8 Years Ago
wow thank you so much for your comments, reallly appreciate them!! glad you liked it :)
I have an interest in writing short stories and poetry in some shape or form apparently since coming here! Being a mother of five means I have no end of inspiration! I'm an animal lover and have an Am.. more..