LASTING MEMORY

LASTING MEMORY

A Poem by hcarson
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having memory problems myself recently making writing harder than normal gave me the idea for this....

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lasting memory
l try so hard to find the right words,
but my mind continues to fail me.
I see you looking, I try again. 
I know I loved you but why..and when?
I reach out a hand; you hold it, so gentle -
'who am I too you?' I scream inside-
while down my lined cheek a tear slides.
A trembling smile begins at my lips;
I recall us now: at a beach sharing chips,
watching t.v as you got down on one knee,
with a voice full of hope, asking, 'Will you Marry me?'
I hold on to the picture, say it out loud.
Your eyes shine, hearing this last memory 
of mine; as I drift, smiling, into an eternal
sleep where all my memories will be mine
to keep.

© 2016 hcarson


Author's Note

hcarson
Dementia..Altzeimers..can't imagine how hard it is to watch a loved one slip away to this illness..must be so hard..all comments and criticisms welcome..

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It's hard for me, because I volunteer at a Memory Care residence for people with dementia. It's very sad, but incredibly touching when the family members come. Sometimes, the residents remember, and sometimes they don't. But when they do remember, it's golden.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

i also worked in care and looked after a man with dementia..it was so sad..he remember nothing reall.. read more



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very emotional poem to read and digest it's a horrible disease. Thanks for sharing your thoughts & I wish you well also.
maria

Posted 8 Years Ago


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hcarson

8 Years Ago

Thank you maria, it is a terrible disease but mmay be one it will be something more curable, your co.. read more
maria  ( rose)

8 Years Ago

thank you so much💝
It's hard for me, because I volunteer at a Memory Care residence for people with dementia. It's very sad, but incredibly touching when the family members come. Sometimes, the residents remember, and sometimes they don't. But when they do remember, it's golden.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

i also worked in care and looked after a man with dementia..it was so sad..he remember nothing reall.. read more
Memories are precious commodities. Over the last few years I learned just how precious they are. Hold on to them and make more. Hug your significants while you can and tell them what they need to hear. There are no “do-overs” in life.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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hcarson

8 Years Ago

very true, you never know when you will lose someone and be left with nothing but memories so best w.. read more
Beautiful, it must be a blessing to have a man like that ;)
I hope he's good for you and it was a nice write.
Keep going.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

thank you luna, glad you liked it, and i appreciate your comments very much ;)
L u n a

8 Years Ago

your welcome!
This is heartbreakingly tender!!!! I'm almost crying!!! I have some memory issues due to a bad neck injury, but I can only imagine how tragic it would feel to be the narrator of this poem, with issues to this degree. You've pegged this on every level. The earnestness, the honesty, the determination to hold onto a thought that's bound to slip thru one's fingers (happens to me constantly these days!) I don't even know this situation firsthand, but your poem is so lifelike, it feels as if I've just experienced it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

thank you Barleygirl, like yourself i'm having memory issues, not to this extent thankfully, i did h.. read more
i can hear the screams inside, the frustration...reminds me of Dickinson's "i felt a funeral in my brain"

like the speaker knows she has sense still breaking through, but also senses she is losing her mind...that awareness of becoming unaware...and the "finished knowing then"
is that ending that is dreaded.

well done, here.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

you have got it spot on Jacob :) thank you so much for your review, i appreciate it very much :)
Even without any illness im forgetting what i have to keep in mind... it is hard to take... you did a brilliant job to pour out the true feelings... i know how hard it is for you or for anyone.... an illness like that is unbearable... and the most sad part of it is that there is no real cure of that illness.... brilliant use of simplicity and i loved how they really spoke the feelings.... i think there is a printing mistake in the line "who am i too you? ", i think you wanted type ''to" instead of "too".... another excellent example of your ability to write down your heart and mind.... full ratinga dear frnd...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Inject Positivity

8 Years Ago

absolutely but it is rare to find frnds like you, most people would have left me right there where i.. read more
hcarson

8 Years Ago

always here for you, regardless where you are or how you are feeling, just a message away :)
Inject Positivity

8 Years Ago

i know, you are a family member to me... thank you for joining this website... you are a mother like.. read more
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Oh my, nice and somewhat sad words at the same time. Forgetting is a curse, especially when it comes to things you want to keep in mind or when it results in illness. Nicely and lightly (in a good sense) elaborated topic. P.S.:Your last lines read splendid. :)
But what a review of mine would it be without being picky and a tad nagging ^^ - the second stanza is missing a line and the third line reads a tiny little bit clumsy somehow...Other than that it reads well. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

V

8 Years Ago

Haha. I've gone through this time too. Now I can focus better, I manage to type poems directly into .. read more
hcarson

8 Years Ago

i do everything on paper first...i love the feel of paper, the smell...i love ink! i entered the wor.. read more
V

8 Years Ago

That's nice. Goos luck.
"I know I loved you but why...and when." my favorite lines. Until that point I was casually reading but I literally gasped a little when the line processed. It was beautiful.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

thank you so much, wasn't sure how this would turn out as have really struggled with writing recentl.. read more
Autonomous

8 Years Ago

I know how you feel, writing gets difficult especially when you start tripping on the littlest detai.. read more
Oh my, I'm so sorry. I'm glad you were strong enough to share this. I hope youre doing well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

it isn't based on anything real just in general if you get me. i have memory issues but thankfully n.. read more

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Added on March 24, 2016
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hcarson
hcarson

cardiff, barry, United Kingdom



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