Close your eyes.....

short poem on how simple it probably is in some homes to make a parent ''ignorent'' to what a person is doing...

CLOSE YOUR EYES.......

CLOSE YOUR EARS, AVERT YOUR EYES.

BOW DOWN YOUR HEAD. IGNORE ANYTHING SAID.

NOTHING TO SEE; NOTHING TO HEAR.

NOTHING GOING ON WITH THOSE YOU HOLD DEAR.

ANYTHING YOU'RE TOLD, YOU KNOW IT'S A LIE -

I'D NEVER DO THAT, COME ON! WOULD I?

SHE'S JEALOUS AND SPOILT, WANTS US TO SPLIT.

IF YOU ARE HONEST..YOU KNOW SHE'S A S**T..

I WILL GO CHAT TO HER, GIVE IT ANOTHER TRY;

TELL HER TO SHUT UP, STOP TELLING THAT LIE!

SO CLOSE YOUR EARS, AVERT YOUR EYES -

AND REMEMBER YOU NEED ME.

BUT SHE TELLS NOTHING BUT LIES...

Author's Note

ALL OMMENTS AND CRITICISMS WELCOME :)

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong and honest words. Sometime hard to know the truth.
"SO CLOSE YOUR EARS, OVERT YOUR EYES -
AND REMEMBER YOU NEED ME.
.BUT SHE TELLS NOTHING BUT LIES..."
People will test us and sometime silence is golden. Hope for a good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[hcarson]

thank you coyote, as you say..ignorence is bliss..escept for the poor person on the end of it..thank you for your comments, always appreciated :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree. Permanent separation can be worst and you are welcome.

[hcarson]

i read a story earlier where i felt the parents had ignored the abuse their daughter was going through with an partner as it made life easier..got me to thinkng..how many people do that and how many different ways it can get done, how many mother's have stood in court and sworn they never knew a partner was abusing their kid..as a mum i find it hard to believ..must be pretty distant to not get suspicious..but who knows..i may be wrong of course..

[Coyote Poetry]

A hard topic. Abuse need to be ID and turn-in. A terrible thing to do to a kid.

[L u n a]

ooh woow, this was a difficult one.
It was very strong until the end.
I like also the rhyming in your work.

[hcarson]

thank you for reading luna, it is a difficult subject, always hard to read anything to do with things like this isn't it, i really appreciate your comments :)

[L u n a]

yeah it is! and no problem ;)

[David Jae]

A strong and powerful message. I love the imagery, it is strong and simple.

If there is a criticism that I could make, I think that you meant "Avert" in the first and last verse, rather than "Overt".

You have a good touch.

[hcarson]

aha i did mean that rather than 'o'..i hadn't even noticed it lol...thank you for your comments and help, very much appreciated :)

[David Jae]

No worries.

[mou]

True and motivating words. Yes ,Love has more power to make the root of life strong rather than the words from the crowd.All words will bend their head in front of a true heart.
Thanks form sharing.

[hcarson]

thank you mou as always your words are much appreciate :)

[Robert Parlange]

Ah, the truth. Nations have gone to war over definitions of “truth.” Families too, for that matter.

[hcarson]

True Robert..doesn't take a lot to start a war in most families either..in mine just the fact the younger son is taller than the elder son was enough to start one the other day..couldn't even try to lie an say he wasn't either neither haha

[jacob erin-cilberto]

when our love is so strong for a partner, our eyes shut out the light of the darkness...we look away and won't believe that person could be responsible for those unimaginable things...
you present a really valid conversation a parent might have with herself...the disbelief...the ignoring of facts...love can really blind us.

i like this the way you present the self-conversation..and how you leave it...usually the real answers don't come with this conversation, just the denial..

[hcarson]

exactly, that was what i thought, so many just flat out refuse to believe when the evidence is smacking them right in the face, such a sad thing but so hard for kids to get help from if the one thatis meant to love them the most won't even acknowledge whats going on. thank you for reading and your comment, much appreciated

[V]

Another sad truth. Sometimes our trust is abused.
We might not follow our intuition anymore because of fear or will to neglect even though things seem to be obvious. We close our eyes to reality with a deep want to stay in the comfort zone, the perfect world and mistake the evil ones who mess with our lives for the good ones and vice versa. Clearly and expressively written down. I like the line "close your ears, overt your eyes", well done. The repetition of it works nicely too.

[hcarson]

thank you. far too many stories like this in the news isn't there, makes me angry when a mum says oh but i didn't no when all neighbours, family and milkman seems to have!!

[V]

Yeah I can imagine. What a false and denying world we live in.

[Shannon]

The push - pull here is very indicative of this kind of relationship. Its all her fault...but let me go get her back..
Work usage - no vs know?

[hcarson]

i know its laziness on my part that i don't change it when i see it lol..sometimes i do...mainly i don't..it's either my 'no' know' or coma splicing...i'm a git for both :) ...i personally would take a hammer to the nuts of any bloke i knew that harmed a kid in this manner and smile all the while..but then i think, most women would, even those without kids, thanks for comment, appreciated as always :)

[Shannon]

Mine is from/form. Sometimes here/hear as well!

[hcarson]

my partners is there/their...i'm alright with that one...everything else is fair game haha

[payalspeaks]

so honest and strong
shows the truth in every line
very well written
xo

[hcarson]

thank you so much for your lovely review, much appreciated ;)

[Mistaken Angel]

The truth is always hard to bear, well done. Strong, honest and intriguing words. Separation is always hard, but most of the time it is for the best. Especially if your partner isn't treating you the way you deserve to be treated. Great read.
~Tealah.

[hcarson]

thank you, im glad you enjoyed, it is hard but sadly some take the easy option and close themselves off to it..sad , thank you for your lovely review :)

[KWP]

yeah wow - a view from within, hard to seperate oneself from those who you love, those who are supposed to be guiding and showing you the way, but really what you get is a pack of lies and hurt. Hard to rise above the BS, but to be the better man, rise above one must, leave the baggage behind and take life and learn to live it for self ...

a penetrating read XXX

[hcarson]

thank you, i'm glad you enjoyed, it is hard to raise a family, needing eyes and ears everywhere..the worst thing you can do however is turn those ears off..thank you for your lovely review :) xxx

[KWP]

ahh you speak the truth I honestly believe it's a mother's gift to have ears to the ground all the time, you can pick up not only on conversation, but emotions, nuances in the way they act, how the converse - yep all of it - I commend you with five kids, I do the daily deed with two teenage boys - they are great human beings and i know that's because my ears are consistently on :)

[hcarson]

exactly KWP, i couldn't agree more..kids can be sneaky enough as it is haha...but i think it is just as immportant for parent to listen to each other and how they are..i read far too many disturbing stories...i do apologies haha..you no the type..where mum says she hadn't realised dad was abusing daughter etc...im sure some are telling the truth but not all..no way..wow i'm cheerful this morning!! lol :)