A VIEW TO ESCAPE

A VIEW TO ESCAPE

A Poem by hcarson
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OK THIS IS ONE OF THOSE RUSH JOBS SO PLEASE EXCUSE IT IF YOU TAKE THE TIME TO READ IT AND HATE IT LOL.

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A VIEW TO ESCAPE


I look through the window. Not much to see.

yet this view that I get is everything to me.

Just on the other side of the pane...so close, yet so far...

The sky, a deep unmarred blue,

just a hint of a tree swaying into view.

Day is withdrawing, here comes the night.

I want to escape,I just don't have the fight.

I sit here and look, trying to imagine me there.

On the other side of the glass, chains shucked off at last.

Seeping through the pane, free of all doubt.

At one with the view. I've finally got out.

no longer a watcher but a contributor too.

Contributing to what? Well that's up to you.

© 2016 hcarson


Author's Note

hcarson
ok, I have a bad foot and am medicated up to the eyeballs so this may not read to you as it does to my floaty mind at the moment...I guess we will see lol

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a hint of pain moving in the poem... i can feel its words.... the title is very appropriate to the concept of the poem... nice choice of words.... "i want to escape, i just don't have the fight" this line hit the right tone of the poem.... clappings!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

thank you IP, i'm glad you liked it :)..maybe the medication isn't so bad after all ;)
Inject Positivity

8 Years Ago

yup.... you are welcome my dear frnd....



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Very good use of description.
"The sky, a deep unmarred blue,
just a hint of a tree swaying into view.
Day is withdrawing, here comes the night."
I liked the ending also. Good to bring the reader into the poem. The above lines were my favorite. Create vision and the close of a day. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote




Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

thank you so much coyote poetry, a lovely review better than i could have hoped for. very much appr.. read more
Coyote Poetry

8 Years Ago

I will come back later tonight and read more. I'm babysitting today.
hcarson

8 Years Ago

you have your hands full...well there is no end of stories on this site to read them to sleep and ge.. read more
I really liked this! Especially the end.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

thank you, your comments much appreciated :)
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I like the floaty state of your mind combined with the longing to go out, it is nicely and easily expressed. Conveys a feeling everyone in their lives can relate to at least once.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

V

8 Years Ago

I mainly used my cell which worked nicely with wc but since a system update crashed it and it is bei.. read more
hcarson

8 Years Ago

I hope you sort it soon, I have been looking at some of your writing, I like it a lot what I have se.. read more
V

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I have to leave for now but will be back soon..
This has potential. The desire and the imagination carrying the speaker through the glass. What would be next - a cup of tea with a local poetry group would be a nice start.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

ohh it would have to be coffee for me lol..in a barrel!! thank you for your comment and taking the t.. read more
ANTO

8 Years Ago

One I.V. coffee drip coming up - *tapping forearm for veins* - espresso okay?
xD
hcarson

8 Years Ago

Oh yea just drip me up and im sorted..love it lol
a hint of pain moving in the poem... i can feel its words.... the title is very appropriate to the concept of the poem... nice choice of words.... "i want to escape, i just don't have the fight" this line hit the right tone of the poem.... clappings!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

thank you IP, i'm glad you liked it :)..maybe the medication isn't so bad after all ;)
Inject Positivity

8 Years Ago

yup.... you are welcome my dear frnd....

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Added on March 4, 2016
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hcarson
hcarson

cardiff, barry, United Kingdom



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