Obsession

Obsession

A Poem by hcarson
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Short poem on obsession, not much else to say lol

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OBSESSION

Obsession is an illness,
No matter the form.
Hijacking the mind with
Which we were born.

Nothing else matters,
all focus is gone.
We only see what we 'need,'
all else is wrong.

It may be a puppy, a car or a bed..
we simply can't settle until the
Obsession is fed!

So when you feel that slipping
of your mind going astray, stay firm,
one and all, and send that
Obsession away!
     Your mind is yours..
      It's here to stay!

© 2016 hcarson


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I think where folks get confused is in understanding the difference between an obsession and lust ... At times the two words carry pretty much the same meaning, but at the same time these two words can convey and carry two completely different meanings ... A man who is obsessed with a woman does so because he clearly lusts after her ... If he did not lust, then there would be no obsession ... Men lust after women, and vice versa, money, power, position, fame, etc., and because they do, the acquisition of these things often becomes a blinding obsession to them ... When they acquire them, the obsession dies down due to the fact that the thrill was in the chase and in the battle for conquest and victory ... Once achieved, most people lose interest, finding that their achievement did not bring them the satisfaction they sought, and so move on to other things to lust after and obsess over ... So, you have penned it pretty true to reality, as the only thing we should obsess over is living, for we are born with a powerful obsession for life and living straight from the womb with that first cry of protest of having some stranger whack us on the arse ... From that instant we become obsessed with two things: Life and living, and not wanting anymore strangers whacking on our behinds ... As you can see by my babbling, I enjoyed your heart penned to page, as you inspired me to rambling on and on ...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

aha thank you marv, i agree, there is a fine line between obsession and lust, i'm glad it got you to.. read more



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I think where folks get confused is in understanding the difference between an obsession and lust ... At times the two words carry pretty much the same meaning, but at the same time these two words can convey and carry two completely different meanings ... A man who is obsessed with a woman does so because he clearly lusts after her ... If he did not lust, then there would be no obsession ... Men lust after women, and vice versa, money, power, position, fame, etc., and because they do, the acquisition of these things often becomes a blinding obsession to them ... When they acquire them, the obsession dies down due to the fact that the thrill was in the chase and in the battle for conquest and victory ... Once achieved, most people lose interest, finding that their achievement did not bring them the satisfaction they sought, and so move on to other things to lust after and obsess over ... So, you have penned it pretty true to reality, as the only thing we should obsess over is living, for we are born with a powerful obsession for life and living straight from the womb with that first cry of protest of having some stranger whack us on the arse ... From that instant we become obsessed with two things: Life and living, and not wanting anymore strangers whacking on our behinds ... As you can see by my babbling, I enjoyed your heart penned to page, as you inspired me to rambling on and on ...

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

aha thank you marv, i agree, there is a fine line between obsession and lust, i'm glad it got you to.. read more
I really like this topic- I struggle with the next best thing that i think will satisfy me.
To contrast this, its interesting to think of obsessions that fuel our fire for life. What about obsession about art- obsession about creative discipline. Just some of my thoughts.
Even an obsession/thought process that is satisfied and released with writing.

I'd love to hear more about how the struggle takes place within you. Physically, emotional- and how our minds can be transformed into a sane state once again.



Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

you are spot on with what you say, for me it was a case of 'i had to have it...now or as soon as pos.. read more
hcarson

8 Years Ago

and thank you bacchus for your lovely review...i got carried away with obsession,,see what i mean ha.. read more
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Obsession can be good and bad, though if it becomes too much, like getting ouf hand, it might turn into something disastrous. I wrote a poem about obsession, too once. I removed it from here because I didn't like it that much. (it needs a rewrite maybe)
Well elaborated topic.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

V

8 Years Ago

It's ok. ;) I'm afraid you will have to remind me of sending it to you, as I tend to forget about th.. read more
hcarson

8 Years Ago

I most certainly will remind you...i will try not to let me get obsessed and hound you lol ;) but ye.. read more
V

8 Years Ago

Ok thanks in advance ;)
I like this prom very much great use of words ! Xxx

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

Thank you caycie...when are you going to give one a go...i really think you should xxx
Caycie carson

8 Years Ago

I will no when I have a good idea anyway x,x
this is amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 I love this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

Thank you shadowfax, much appreciated :)
Rose Jaeger Kaneki

8 Years Ago

welcome, anytime
a very true write on the subject of 'obsession '... the whole poem conveys the exact same feeling of what an obsessed person feels...it is something that many people feel these days...people get obsessed about simple things and ultimately loose the true meaning of life... . short and very to the point subject which made it very catchy.... overall a very good work.... full ratings....

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

Thank you ID, i kind get like this over the most random of things it drives me mad...ive decfided it.. read more
Inject Positivity

8 Years Ago

absolutely.... you just put you out there... its about enjoying yourself by doin what you love doing.. read more
It's a nice topic chosen and I am sure a lot more can be added to this piece. Though at the moment, I couldn't see it as a poem. Maybe because some words could have easily been avoided.

for example : "Obsession, an illness " (no need for is)
similarly "All focus gone" (no need for is)

In poetry we can do away with some of the verbs or prepositions as long as the meaning is portrayed properly and doesn't sound weird.

Again I feel the last verse could be tweaked a little, cut down words. Less is more sometimes. I had the same problem at first as well( sometimes i still do), so I can understand this one well.

And the repetition of the word obsession serves no purpose as such. The word could be replaced with "it" the second time it is mentioned. The flow doesn't seem that natural and it sounds forced.


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

hcarson

8 Years Ago

Well sound forced is good i guess coz that is kinda how i feel about any form of obsession, somethin.. read more
Érenn

8 Years Ago

Your welcome ^^

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Added on February 29, 2016
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hcarson
hcarson

cardiff, barry, United Kingdom



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