Obsession

Short poem on obsession, not much else to say lol

OBSESSION

Obsession is an illness,

No matter the form.

Hijacking the mind with

Which we were born.

Nothing else matters,

all focus is gone.

We only see what we 'need,'

all else is wrong.

It may be a puppy, a car or a bed..

we simply can't settle until the

Obsession is fed!

So when you feel that slipping

of your mind going astray, stay firm,

one and all, and send that

Obsession away!

     Your mind is yours..

      It's here to stay!

Reviews

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

I think where folks get confused is in understanding the difference between an obsession and lust ... At times the two words carry pretty much the same meaning, but at the same time these two words can convey and carry two completely different meanings ... A man who is obsessed with a woman does so because he clearly lusts after her ... If he did not lust, then there would be no obsession ... Men lust after women, and vice versa, money, power, position, fame, etc., and because they do, the acquisition of these things often becomes a blinding obsession to them ... When they acquire them, the obsession dies down due to the fact that the thrill was in the chase and in the battle for conquest and victory ... Once achieved, most people lose interest, finding that their achievement did not bring them the satisfaction they sought, and so move on to other things to lust after and obsess over ... So, you have penned it pretty true to reality, as the only thing we should obsess over is living, for we are born with a powerful obsession for life and living straight from the womb with that first cry of protest of having some stranger whack us on the arse ... From that instant we become obsessed with two things: Life and living, and not wanting anymore strangers whacking on our behinds ... As you can see by my babbling, I enjoyed your heart penned to page, as you inspired me to rambling on and on ...

[hcarson]

aha thank you marv, i agree, there is a fine line between obsession and lust, i'm glad it got you to thinking , i enjoy to hear your thoughts on things, always makes me, in turn, think and see things differently to how i may have originally, thank you so much for your words, very much appreciated as always :)

[Bacchus]

I really like this topic- I struggle with the next best thing that i think will satisfy me.
To contrast this, its interesting to think of obsessions that fuel our fire for life. What about obsession about art- obsession about creative discipline. Just some of my thoughts.
Even an obsession/thought process that is satisfied and released with writing.

I'd love to hear more about how the struggle takes place within you. Physically, emotional- and how our minds can be transformed into a sane state once again.

[hcarson]

you are spot on with what you say, for me it was a case of 'i had to have it...now or as soon as possible or i would just feel niggly and so unsettled..i believe i have strides in stopping that now as i recognise it really isn't that important...i take most thing to extremes with it tho in many ways, for example i'm in college at the moment and i obsess over the work..will research extra way more than i need to , obseessed i need to know everything..which i will forget within 24 hours anyway haha, when i worked i took all the hours that went as i felt i had to be there constanty etc...i never seem to find that middle ground..i tire myself going way to far all the time when it isn't needed..i will research my friends projects in case they need help with it...its ridiculous!!!..maybe i dont have as much control over it as i thought haha. its like a constant nagging need to do something in my chest, drives me insane!

[hcarson]

and thank you bacchus for your lovely review...i got carried away with obsession,,see what i mean haha, your words are much appreciated :)

[V]

Obsession can be good and bad, though if it becomes too much, like getting ouf hand, it might turn into something disastrous. I wrote a poem about obsession, too once. I removed it from here because I didn't like it that much. (it needs a rewrite maybe)
Well elaborated topic.

[hcarson]

Thank you vanessandthecat, it is a tricky to sometimes decipher what is truely necessary and worth striving for and what is simple, unnecessary desire with your brain making you chase it for no good reason. Self control isn't always the easiest thing to attain at times but I'm getting there...I hope lol. I would very much like to see your revised (or old) poem and see your take on it :) thank you for your cimments, much appreciated

[V]

You're right and you're welcome. If I have my cell back, I'll send it to you. It's on saved there (and on a SD card I cannot use with my current technical device, almost a bit irritating that I never wrote it down on paper or printed it out).

[V]

*ignore the on

[hcarson]

I understand you frustration, i often end up either with dodgy technology that either doesnt go what i want it to or..more often..i dont have the know how to make it do as i want it to lol...i look forward to seeing it, i love seeing other peoples takes and opinions on thingscas our culters and life experiences can really give us som amazing differences of thoughtnthat we can all learn something from :)

[hcarson]

Excuse the awful spelling..smoking at the backdoor and trying to type on this silly little screen isn't the easiest things to manage lol

[V]

It's ok. ;) I'm afraid you will have to remind me of sending it to you, as I tend to forget about things like this...

[hcarson]

I most certainly will remind you...i will try not to let me get obsessed and hound you lol ;) but yea, will definitely givevu the odd nudge :)

[V]

Ok thanks in advance ;)

[Caycie carson]

I like this prom very much great use of words ! Xxx

[hcarson]

Thank you caycie...when are you going to give one a go...i really think you should xxx

[Caycie carson]

I will no when I have a good idea anyway x,x

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

this is amazing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1 I love this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[hcarson]

Thank you shadowfax, much appreciated :)

[Rose Jaeger Kaneki]

welcome, anytime

[Inject Positivity]

a very true write on the subject of 'obsession '... the whole poem conveys the exact same feeling of what an obsessed person feels...it is something that many people feel these days...people get obsessed about simple things and ultimately loose the true meaning of life... . short and very to the point subject which made it very catchy.... overall a very good work.... full ratings....

[hcarson]

Thank you ID, i kind get like this over the most random of things it drives me mad...ive decfided it can go and not control me anymore, as you say the real meaning and things in life are far more important

[Inject Positivity]

absolutely.... you just put you out there... its about enjoying yourself by doin what you love doing.....im glad to get to read your unique thoughts.... life is much bigger, its worth living...

[Érenn]

It's a nice topic chosen and I am sure a lot more can be added to this piece. Though at the moment, I couldn't see it as a poem. Maybe because some words could have easily been avoided.

for example : "Obsession, an illness " (no need for is)
similarly "All focus gone" (no need for is)

In poetry we can do away with some of the verbs or prepositions as long as the meaning is portrayed properly and doesn't sound weird.

Again I feel the last verse could be tweaked a little, cut down words. Less is more sometimes. I had the same problem at first as well( sometimes i still do), so I can understand this one well.

And the repetition of the word obsession serves no purpose as such. The word could be replaced with "it" the second time it is mentioned. The flow doesn't seem that natural and it sounds forced.

[hcarson]

Well sound forced is good i guess coz that is kinda how i feel about any form of obsession, something forcing you into doing,buying,getting something that at any other time u may not want or need, against your will if you like. Some words could be removed, its that typical thing of writing as i speak grrr lol..will get there eventually, thank you for your comments :)

[Érenn]

Your welcome ^^