Of Goldfish and Men

This is written for the BAD POETRY contest..please remember that!...lol

Of Goldfish and Men…


How do we feel the pain of a goldfish crying,
While it’s friend floats on it’s side now dying,
It’s tears never seen, in it’s water they blend,
We feel not the grief of our small scaly friend.
We callously take the carcass and flush it down,
The water masking the survivor’s whimpering sound,
With the gurgling water going round and round,
And round and round, and round and round,
Sigh, damn fish go down! go down!
O corpse to the septic sepulchre in the cold, cold ground.
Yea, never seeing the tear in the survivors eyes,
The goldfish’s  glistening glint in it’s eye never dries.
It’s pain unnoticed as in it’s own toilet it will dwell,
Till death takes it to another, a porcelain portal to hell.
Flush, flush,
                   …….tis
                              …..over.

Author's Note

Again..BAD POETRY contest..it is suppose to suck..hahaha
(sad thing is, it may be my best yet..:-p ) LOL

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

If this is for bad poetry..lol.. I don't know if you'll win or not??.. this was seriously humorous.. and the topic is something that is very unique.. but the rhythm and flow is pretty good! Do goldfish cry.. I can honestly say I never thought of that.. what a torturous departure!!! Heartwrenching for the little ones. Hope you win.. this was good.. it made me laugh .. lol.. poor goldfishies!

[An owl on the moon]

Ok, just had to laugh! It's so bad it's good! Loved the imagery you create and the wordplays and rhymes are simply classic. Thank you for sharing in the fun (and of course the extreme sadness of loosing a fish)!!!

[Ashley]

Wow. Seriously funny.

[~Sorcha~]

I can't really decide if this is bad or not. Makes me think of my entry for the bad poetry contest in that I can't say if my poem is bad because I don't understand what the hell I wrote lol. But I like this poem, it's a unique concept not thought about really.

[Meg]

This is great! It's really funny and a little too well written to be in a bad poetry contest if you ask me :]

[Through the Gateway]

Oh. My. Sweet. Deity. Of. Your. Choice.

This was freakin' hilarious, Hoyt! I think I ruptured something trying not to laugh out loud at work!

I don't know if it's good or bad...but I love it!

[cest la vie]

Bad poetry.. well mister maybe/maybe not? See humor is your forte.
I love this, too fracken funny!!

[Emily]

Haha, this is hilarious! Even though it is for a bad poetry contest the flow is good and quite catchy! I laughed out loud reading this!

Good luck in the contest!

[Marie Anzalone]

OMG I'm laughing so hard!

You are so sure to get a heartfelt, "that was so deep" review on this from someone...

It's like a 15 year-old biker chick wanna-be, who just joined PETA, wrote this about her conflicted emotions after watching New Moon. I wanna be bad, but cannot quite be detached. Oh too funny! Gold star on this one, Hoyt!

PS By the way, I wasn't aware that goldfish "whimpered"... and I thought I knew my animals!

[Cool Handless Luke]

Hilarious is what it is! I like it!