If Time Were On A String

If only time were on a string- I'd tug it back and you'd be here with me.

If only time were on a string
Then I could tug it back
And you’d be here with me
We’d walk in all those moments
That we didn’t want to leave
And again say all the words
So they could linger longer in the air
We could hear the love inside them
And hold them to our hearts
And if the moment slipped away again
We’d simply pull it back
Yes, if only time were on a string
It could be held by you and me
So I could hold your hand forever
And never have to watch you leave
Yes, if time were on a string
You would never have to leave

Author's Note

I have to say, I'm pretty happy with how this piece came out. I'd love some feedback on it! :)

Reviews

[Thea Fuentebella]

awww. this is sweet ans sad. and also nice concept of time being on a string... wouldn't that be convenient haha great write

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

What a wonderful concept...........love it!

[RiNNA<3]

a great piece. loved the unwritten rhythm in this and the melancholy feel to it. and the way you compared it to a string, was pretty cool[: but i feel like it's kind of a cliff hanger.

[Jeff Bresee]

We would all wear that string right out wouldn't we...

[Shante Payne]

This is so sweet and what all lovers think at one point or another. I love the entire concept about time being on a string, and you holding it...great write. a favorite.

[kewlbluetiger]

Really Really nice poem. It had a lyrical feel to it. I think of so many moments in my life I'd like to revisit. You should be proud of this work. It's fantastic!

[A.Lee]

I absolutely love this. I'm not a huge fan of love poems usually, but this one really made me smile. I can just imagine sitting there and as time starts to pass on you tug the string back to capture the moment again. So beautiful. Excellent write. One of my favorites of yours. 100%

[Sincerely, Alex]

I adore the thought of time being held by a string.
You did absolutely amazing on this.

[Adelia Alighieri]

It has a very subtle metaphoric as well as emotive tone to it. Great job. :)