Can you see it?

“Hold out your hands.”

A calming voice spoke.

“Put them in your face,

Get ready to take note.”

 

The world was different now,

“How can this be?”

“You’re enlightened now,

You can actually see.”

 

The holy one and I walked,

Amongst death and hell.

As eyeless faces,

Still cannot tell.

 

“You saw the ways of man,

Before you even had your eyes,

But you knew this was wrong,

Their content with lies.”

I see my family,

They’re eyeless too.

Living better lives than most,

But still don’t have a clue

 

“This wasn’t my vision,

I had wonderful plans.

But greed came in, love went out.

And you all live in this wasteland.”

 

Mindless bodies,

Partying, killing, not having a care.

Sightless and heartless,

Is polluting our air.

 

And there we stood watching,

With tears from our opened eyes.

Being voices of reason,

While you all laugh and our world dies.

Reviews

[00000000000000000000000..]

I really love this because I get where you're coming from seen the very same. You speak in high levels of understanding that you have seen the bad parts and no1 gave a crap to see with you or support you. You lost love you were alone saw the world for what it is and mans ways.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Fantastic
So deep spiritual
Love this can’t wait to read more of your work

[Courtney Hough]

Thanks so much!!

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Praise where it’s due
Nice to meet you 🙏

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Ps love how you use conversation in this poem

[Courtney Hough]

Oh thanks! I think that’s one of my favorite ways to write!

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Yes I love it
It draws the reader in

[.]

Very sobering and startling! Nice!!

[Levi Levin]

Great job with putting this together. It has good flow and a good rhyme. Great job!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, maybe blindness would be a blessing...not seeing what the world is doing to itself...perhaps the current situation is a wake up call.
but then again, Oedipus proved that we might see more when we are physically blind than we saw with two good eyes.
and your poem seems to express that those with eyes don't see outside, those with no eyes finally understand...we can feel it.

[Courtney Hough]

It is so sad how the world has become! Thanks for reviewing!:)

[mcceewrites]

I love the imagery here, and I know you mentioned that it is one of the tools you use to express yourself poetically. This is a beautiful representation. I am definitely taking pointers because the imagery is not my strongest tool. This poem really put me in a movie! Also, love the picture you put along with it. Great writing!

[Courtney Hough]

You’re the sweetest! Sometimes I feel like that’s all I can write! I really appreciate you taking the time to review this! :)

[mcceewrites]

You're very welcome!

[emmajoy]

How true most of your well formed poem is, what goes on in what should be a beautiful world, becomes more and more damaged day by day. If only more people stood up and said as much as you, perhaps those who COULD do something about this global tragedy WOULD react as Humanity deserves. However, meantime, Power, Greed and - elsewhere Apathy remains. Your final stanza nudges all the senses.

[Chris]

Semper Fi... and thoughtfully expressed.

[Courtney Hough]

Thanks Chris!:)

[Onlyme]

loved the imagery and flow of words. To this hesrtfelt real life poem, of death,distruction and woes and greed on this planet called earth. and how most humans are so stuck indide their own protective world of reality to them and no one else.

[Courtney Hough]

Thanks so much!

[Phill Oz O'fee]

They have eyes, but they do not see, ears and they do not listen - very poetically encapsulated within the stanza flow of your wisdom filled write - makes the reader stop and think - excellent poem! Bless - :-)

[Courtney Hough]

thanks so much!