Those Two

It was something to behold, those two

To anyone involved they saw nothing special

But they were, they were amazing

No one could see it, no one could comprehend it

They were two normal kids, two foolish kids with impossible dreams

No one is extraordinary in this life, that's what they all thought

Sometimes they fought and snapped and bit and ran and screamed

But the days after those days were sweet

Like the day after a fierce storm

That sweet smell of rain and the way the sun shines so much brighter

The days after were just like that, brand new

They lived in the dark, those two

They lived in secret, not on purpose

They were just too busy living in each other's breath to care

Living in one another's hair and eyes and essence and soul

Those two were small and special and so so wild

They were carefree and loud because what is life if you don't celebrate it

They needed each other because... how could they not

No one knew the truth

They only showed glimpses into their own little world

Those two, they knew they were unique

They saw it in stranger's faces, in the faces of family and friends

They saw that they were different, that were something alien

Those two, waiting to run away

Waiting to be able to live their life in the sun

They haven't realized they've already been in the sun, since the first day they met

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Well, I'd say you've a lot of potential in you; your style needs only to be sharpened. Multiple lines were either too long, or too short, and you overused a couple words a bit. Nonetheless, I admire your ability to construct a concept and string it together, but you could use some critique and improvement.

[A.M]

Thanks so much for your input, i really appreciate it. Kind of a work in progress i know but thank you!