Painless Hearts

Read the author's note please?....

Let Me Burn.

Let Me Die.

Let the pain take over my soul.

 

Trying to stand my ground.

But everything around me is falling apart.

Trying to stand the pain.

 

The secrets are whispering all around.

The rumors are heard by every living thing.

While I stand in the corner of the room.

 

 

The tears streaming down my cheeks.

Thinking of what I would do next.

 

A knife lay close by.

 

 The carpet is soaked by blood.

The screams will never be forgotten,

 

My soul now lies where everything is perfect.

Where there is no pain.

No rumors.

No secrets.

Where everything is perfect.....

Author's Note

Feedback is much appreciated! This is my first dark poems
Lol I didn't know what to put as a title so I picked a random thingy mabobber for it XD :3
Thanks for reading!

Reviews

[therisa]

Sigh. Reading this poem, I feel like my teenage years are coming back to the foreground. How for 3 years, I tried to shove a knife, into my chest, but failed. Even now, in my forties, this feeling still exist for me. Am hoping, you're not writing from personal experience, rather the emotions of those, close to you. Thank you, for sharing this very powerful and emotional poem, with us.

[Forever Hidden]

Thank you miss! :)

[therisa]

Your welcome. Please call me, Therisa.

[writer4eva]

love this! i can feel the emotion u had when writing this, and thats what u want in a good poem.

[Forever Hidden]

Man Thankss!!!!!!!! :"D

[writer4eva]

no prob :)

[first second third]

it is so often i feel like that it touched me deep its awsome! and dark is my thing to kinda

[Forever Hidden]

Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!! :D

[first second third]

fee free to ceck my work out

[Forever Hidden]

I shall once I am free :D

[first second third]

ok:)

[beautiful dreamer]

wow. this is so powerful. good job sky!

[Forever Hidden]

THANK YOU! :D

[beautiful dreamer]

YOU WELCOME! XD

[poetickeys]

I love the pain expressed in this piece! Reading dark poetry has always had a dangerous yet enticing feel..

I am very new to this site and would greatly appreciate any feedback in a review on my first and only piece.. Thank you

[Forever Hidden]

Thank you!
And I will ^^

[Whiskurz]

Dark poetry can be fun to write and fun to read....and it can serve as a healing purpose....Very well penned my friend.....Whisk

[Forever Hidden]

Thank you! ^0^

[Sami Khalil]

Wonderful...:)

[Forever Hidden]

Thank you ^^

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...^^~^^ :)

[zainul]

The girl is dead.
Let her sleep in peace.

[Forever Hidden]

Thank you for your review...

[zainul]

You are most welcome

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarri..]

The title surely has nothing to do with the poem, still liked it

[Forever Hidden]

Yes I'm fully aware of that.
Thank you for the review

[Adam Lebzo -RonninWarrior-]

Thank you for writing