Gabe - Two

Gabe

            I woke in the morning to the pounding of feet as they rushed across the ceiling. Hersch sat up slowly, blinking confusedly at the wall, and Erich started awake above me as dust from the ceiling crumbled on to him. Jim rolled over and continued to snore.

None of us could seem to remember where we were. It took a minute, but it dawned on Hersch first. “S**t!” he exclaimed, “S**t, what time is it?” It occurred to me a second later and I scrambled for my watch.

“Goddamn!” I said once I could focus my eyes long enough to read the time. “It’s almost eight!”

“Eight?” Erich’s roar from above made me jump. “F**k!” He hit the floor in front of me as we all scrambled out of bed.

We rushed to our uniforms, barely remembering which pieces we were supposed to have. No one remembered Jim until we were halfway out the door.

“Get up, a*****e!” ordered Hersch, who, again, was the first to notice what the rest of us had forgotten. He tossed the tan slacks and white shirt at the snoring lump, which started awake and almost slipped off the top bunk.

Erich was the first one out the door, pulling his sweater-vest over his head. I was behind him, buttoning my shirt and fumbling with my tie, then Hersch, glasses askew, sliding along in his socks with Jim, a half-naked tangle of lanky limbs, bringing up the rear.

We scurried through the halls for a long time, since apparently no one knew where we were actually going. We were looking for room two-fifteen, and I was the first one to spot it. Confused and out of breath, I yelled, “Eccola! Eccola! Due quindici!”  This obviously made no sense to anyone, and the next thing I knew, someone hit me behind and I went flying through the air, smashed my face into Erich’s rock-hard back, and tumbled through the door.

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[Dakota]

Well what a way to start the year! Love how no one remembered Jim until the last second! Let's see how they all respond to Gabe getting the hell knocked out of him for no reason.


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[Coyote Poetry]

A good start to a new school. Being late is a bad way to start a new education and meet the teacher. A short chapter. I like the situation and the ending. A excellent chapter.
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