Quiet Storm

Many feelings from different emotions

My nose fizzes
My mouth twitches
My neck glitches in anxiety
My cheeks burn red
I lower my head
I cry silently

My brow creases
My stance paralyses
My hands drum a quiet storm
My eyebrows raise
I stiffen my gaze
I feel that I have torn

My face crumples
My brain emits fire
My anger overflows with hopeless despair
I bite my lip
Not much - just a bit
A life that isn't fair

Author's Note

First time I've written a poem with rhyming - thoughts?

Reviews

[Kat Mandu]

I prefer rhyming poetry, I think it has more rhythm to it and flows better. This poem has a nice flow and really conveys the wild anger I think it is trying to capture.

[viola]

For the most part I think it works well. I really like how you break the rhyme scheme in the last stanza once the anger overflows. The only part that I think doesn't quite work is in the second stanze
"My brow creases
My stance paralyses"
That rhyme feels forced. Other than that, it works well!

[Koushik Sen]

nice. I like it. the rhyming doesn't sound forced. so it works as a whole. great.

[GalaxyGhost]

I like how the tension is building. You can almost feel like taking cover from the oncoming storm. It's like fighting a battle on the inside and out. You definitely have a talent for writing emotion into this poem!

[Dynafox]

I like it. Like a simple analysis of when rage is building but you know you can't just explode.