Stained Glass

 

I'm painting your portrait on a wall of stained glass,

And gathering the pieces of an unending puzzle.

I chiseled your sculpture in a stone made of riddles

And erected a mystery,

Forever unsolved.

 

You've spun me a web of twisted fantasy,

Of love, and other such demons,

And I am an insect that writhes in it's depths.

You've left me to struggle;

Drowning in this ocean of mystery

That you have created

In my honour.

 

I'm painting your portrait on a wall of stained glass;

Every blessed caress of the sun

Sets it ablaze with the fire of passion

And breathes life to another enigma.

Reviews

[Crystal L. Test]

What do you mean mine is better?! Mine is just very different. I really liked this piece. I would've never been able to write something this thought-provoking at your age. Bravo! This had a sorrow to it. I felt that there was much left unspoken about a relationship. Almost as if there were ghosts from the past passing down a corridor. Great imagery and a great job. :)

[Michelle Legault]

This is awsm holly:)

As I was reading the poem, an image of a beautiful stained glass window peaced together with emotions lingered on my mind. Su[erb work.

Profound eh?

ily ml(L)

[Dr Weirdballs]

As a whole, I enjoyed reading this poem. My favorite part is, "You've spun me a web...
writhes in its depths." My least favorite part is, "ocean of mystery." Like I said, I like the big picture, I just wish you would of dragged the web imagery out a little further. I really like your style.
Good day,
Doc

[Michael William Fowler]

you have a way with words i must say, iv read all you work and you seem to take great care in your choice of words and structure. definetly got talent.

look forward to reviewing more of your work with a little more detail but its 3am mikey's mind is in shut down mode.

great visuals in there too ;)

Mike

[Griznard]

Great imagery and its well written. I'm guessing it pertains to someone you love, boyfriend perhaps. I did really like it though gave a good image to the idea.

[Ashly Christen]

i like this
nicely done
:)

[Geist]

I really love this piece and the imagery it provides as well. A very nice job you did with this. :) Thanks for sharing it!


Geist

[Kevin Connolly]

Great imagery, Holly. You make your lover sound like an enigma, a puzzle, a 'stone made of riddles', a 'mystery forever unsolved'.
And why? Because of deceit... leaving you out of your depth, drowning... in misery?
Excellent poem, Holly.

[Drew Scot]

I've got to be honest...
It's a good thing you warned us not to judge because of the age thing.
You are very good.
This piece is a deep and winding poem.
I'm looking forward to more of your writing.
TruPeace
d.s.

[Memnoch]

I liked this Holly and at time it made me think of a spider in a church? Great write, Thanks for sharring.
Kelley Frost