the world lost a awesome man

today is black the sky is gray
it hurts right now but it will be okay

the world lost a man that was a soldier of him and the world
he fought threw all to stay alive and god called him home

he's looking at me now wondering why I am writing this but it makes sense
he touched everyone in his own special way today his body took over his mind and heart

so now I'm writing in rememerince of him and tring not to weep myself to sleep

Reviews

[Alessander]

I HATE pointing out typos in such pieces, but I must. It's "sense" not "sence" and "memrince" I don't think is a word. "In Memorium" (which I'm pretty sure I mispelled) would be much more appropriate - I would strongly recommend Tennyson's "In Memorium" - a long, emotive mourning of a beloved.

"Better to have loved and lost
Than not have loved at all"

Sorry for your loss.

[I Am Svetlana]

Wonderful! I love the emotion in this and this is very true in today's world. Soldiers are risking their own lives to protect everyone else around them...sometimes they come back, sometimes they don't. Great work! You got talent

[Aiden Alyx]

this really tugs at the heart strings my dear. its beautiful.

This is a beautiful and very touching poem.
Your emotions come through it very strongly.
You might want to go through and fix up some grammatical and spelling errors.
~CF

[itsjustme]

touching and sweet piece of writing. i can really feel the emotion in this. i respect the soldiers for risking their lives to protect us. all those people doing whatever it takes to protect liberty :) god bless them

[Kristen]

Very heartfelt and touching, nice work.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is a sweet poem. I like how the kind memories give you strength to carry on with your life. Gone but not forgotten. He lives on forever in the way he shaped
your life.

[Scarlet Pulse]

This poem is touching and very emotional. It is very sad when we lose someone we love and important to us. It is a good expression of your emotions and feelings. I'm sure you don't care, but there are some misspelled words. (sence, memerince, tring, god (God).) Maybe some line breaks would be helpful to pace the poem as well. Good job expressing your feelings though.

[zombiikillah666]

Flows well, and very beautiful.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Very touching and sad writing.. but with a great tribute to someone so close and special. It's so sad to lose a grandparent.. or any close family member for that matter. Sorry for your loss.. he sounded like a great man you did a beautiful job here!

[Katie L]

i love it it is very sad