Hoping for Serenity

Up here

floating above

all the darkness

black clouds

haunting thoughts

swirl below

in the serenity 

of life

without faults

without wishes

no hurt

it can't be found

too many regrets

yet life

holds him in

keeps him here

forcing him

to keep living

the sinner will

for he

is no quitter

and no fault

can be

made right after death

Author's Note

I haven't posted one in forever, but here you go.

Reviews

[writer in trial]

I loved it. :)
I dig the depth lying within it. That's what i loved in this poem. I felt this in different human's perception. Like someone who is heavily depressed with his life, but just living it to keep going or someone who is trying hard to destroy his life but can't due to some positive force stopping him or a murderer who is doing so many sins but yet surviving because it's not the time for his death which seems to be a long time.

Good job Dear :)

[Pollai]

This is nice, good to see you back. This one seems less edited than others, like you put whatever came as opposed to trying to form a specified piece, at least that's the feeling I got from the way it's written. I like those kind of pieces, the in the moment ones which have multi-meanings. I really liked this stanza:

yet life
holds him in
keeps him here
forcing him
to keep living

Good work :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Once your dead life is a mote point. It's good to see you back on the WC Harrison.

[Rita L. Sev]

Haven't seen you in while - glad you're here!

I like the form you went with here - a free verse of short lines, giving the reader pause to let the words sink in. I can feel the heavy heart throughout the read. love the affirmation in the last stanza -

he
is no quitter
and no fault
can be
made right after death

Absolutely true. Keep writing, Harrison!

[Rita L. Sev]

*Harrisen (sorry -typo!) :)

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you! Yeah, it's been a while! I'm still writing though.
I'm glad that you enjoyed it! :)