Goodbye

Written to my ex.

You broke me down,

wrecked my emotions,

tore my heart out

my tears became

Oceans, dragged me down

under the waves

I was depressed before,

now my emotions are

Slaves, to my thoughts

and despite all this

I have forgiven you

so that I will find

Bliss, in my life

so I can be content,

because my grudge

really showed the 

Extent, of the hurt

though now I've let go

through forgiveness

my pain in the wind will

blow.

Author's Note

I wrote this about 3 minutes ago.
So before I wrote this I was thinking about who I am and what I stand for.
I decided that I talk a lot of talk about being a good person and showing love, but yet I hate on my ex even though she cheated on me.
I am completely hypocritical if I continue to slander her.
So, I decided to send her a message saying that I have forgiven her, because I have never told her that. I sat and cried for a few minutes, because a lot of emotions came out when I finally clicked send.
I wrote this poem, because I want people to know how I now feel about the situation. I no longer hate her, because I do not hate anyone.

I hope you enjoy.

Reviews

[Rita L. Sev]

Harrisen, you really have a great grasp of the reasons for writing. This poem is well written, and has pulled something from you that needed to get out. You also show tremendous wisdom in your forgiveness: "I have forgiven you so that I will find Bliss, in my life..." So true, forgiveness is not so much for the person being forgiven as it is so the other can let go. Well done!

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you so much. I actually have been feeling so much more, I guess you could say 'uplifted' ever since I sent her the message, because I no longer feel the hate towards her.

[Rita L. Sev]

Good for you! I can tell you that this is always the way. Life is a balance between holding on and letting go...

[Charu Charms]

It's beautiful, Harrisen! One of ur bests.

[Terohime]

I enjoyed this poem, it was well written, and it told the reader a bit about the author as well. Good job.
~Res

[Terohime]

I enjoyed this poem, it was well written, and it told the reader a bit about the author as well. Good job.
~Res

[Rebecca Hope Rouston]

lovely. so fluid, my eyes took every word in with effortless ease(: quite the pleasure to read.

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! :)

[unsavable_soul]

I would like to begin with sorry for the delay friend, I have been busy lately and have been limited in my time and concentration. Please keep them coming.

This is a very nice piece, I liked how it moves through your states of being, pained and jaded, finding forgiveness, and self renewal in a better hope. This is excellent. I hope writing this did good for you. I very much enjoyed this portion.
"tore my heart out
my tears became
Oceans, dragged me down
under the waves"
It made me think of a song that when pained the most or confronting renewal in the light of shading such pain. If you were interested I can post a link. I relate all things with music, sorry. I am not sure if you wanted any critique so I ask if you do? I tend to like to leave emotional works alone, you never get that moment back and what you wrote is the closest it gets.
Sincerely
Christopher
Hope you are finding peace in your new found existence.

[Harrisen Viator]

It is all good, man. Thank you, it felt great writing this.
And yeah, definitely let me know what the link is! And yeah, I'll take your criticism on this poem!
Thank you,
Harrisen

[unsavable_soul]

It's a dance song but the theme isn't, also you don't want your speakers too loud, set them low and raise them.
Wolfshiem - Once In A Lifetime
Here it is.
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kLgxxzHo-As
I usually right click, open new tab... redundant I am sure for someone in college.
chris

[unsavable_soul]

n/m
copy and paste

[Shy]

It gave me the impression of a classical heartsick poem
I kinda dislike it at first, then realised how it all seemed thought out
There is always something special your writings

[Delaney]

I honestly have to say, this truly inspired me. And inspired me more than just emotionally, it has inspired me physically. This, and the advice of my therapist, has pushed me to make a decision. The decision to forget and let go, onto a grudge that I have unwillingly held onto for eight years. The effect somebody has had over me by simply being, for an action they performed when they were a child. I have let them hold me down for far too long, and this helped me inspire a piece I have actually posted on here, Lost in Age. Where I address a similar topic like this- a broken heart. And the grudge and lingering pain that is left when they are gone. And how to overcome that without them present. I have just recently decided to let go of this and move on, so I am on a slow progression of moving on with it all. I have no feelings or hatred for this person, just the pang of rejection and frankly, intimidation by their thought and presence. But I am through the "ducking-my-head-and-running-away" phase. I am ready to face my feelings and live my own life, without their effect. This had influenced me a day or two ago. I am sorry it took me until now to address it and thank you for it.

Yours truly, Delaney

[Harrisen Viator]

I'm glad that I was able to influence you into making such a big decision! That means a lot to me. That something that I wrote about myself, influenced you positively. This brings a lot of joy to me. I hope that you will someday be content in the situation that you are in.
Thank you.
Harrisen

[Delaney]

Hopefully. It has truly affected me for such an extensive period of time, as well as other things from my childhood. The worst part is that it happened in my childhood. That was a fundamental aspect of who I am, from the very basics. It's not something that can be altered over night. But hopefully soething altered over time.

Yours truly, Delaney

[Baby Ricochet]

Harrison this is a sweet little poem. I like the short, punchy structure. So far as the content goes; You seem a sensitive young man and you will learn romance is a beautiful, life giving b***h.

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you. Yeah I have had my entanglements with romance so far, and it sucks, but it's such a good thing. I hate it, but I love it. It's just something that I'll have to do deal with for the rest of my life.

[Ees]

This poem is well written and the flow is spot on! I enjoyed reading it, but I was also left with the lingering question: If you have let this person go, how is it that you can write a poem on them?
That was probably your point, though wasn't it?

Personally I don't believe in forgiveness. I believe in letting go, but forgiveness is a whole different matter. Forgiveness implies more chances and setting aside what has happened before, I don't see the value in that.

[Harrisen Viator]

No, I was so overcome with emotion from letting go of the past, that I felt the need to write this.
I understand what you mean, but I have to forgive. I can't hold a grudge against someone forever, and we never speak anymore so I'll be fine in that respect, but it really isn't my personality to hold on to hateful feelings.

[Ees]

It doesn't have to be hateful to be held. It can be accepted for what it is, but acceptance is different that forgiveness. That is what I believe.

[Ees]

For instance, somebody I know bailed on me. hardercore than I would believe. Years later we are comfortable friends again, but never romance. I have never forgiven him, but it is still cool to go hang out and read with him or see a further show. But I haven't forgiven him for leaving me waiting with a bag and no transportation. That was like seven years ago, ehh, prob six.