For the three little rascals

Poetic letter to my three favorite people in the world.

For the three little rascals

whom I love so much

you give my life meaning,

which you can't understand.

For, I am way older,

and had so many problems

at your young age, that

of my life, depression took command.

I wish this upon none,

so you, I will protect, and

love. Know that you three

are my reasons for living.

Suicide haunts my mind

and it probably won't stop,

but for you I'll hold on,

to the joy you are giving.

I love you so much,

I've said this already,

tears come to my eyes

for I miss you terribly so.

This distance is far, and 

it's only getting worse,

I have to start a life

and for that I must go.

This is where I must say

that whenever you're blue

you can always call

I'll listen and be there.

I'm always your friend

so you don't have to worry,

I'll never forget you, because

of the love that we share.

Author's Note

Okay, well I wrote this poem as a letter to my younger siblings for when they are older and can fully understand it's message, since I'm 10+ years older than them.
I would greatly appreciate anyone who would want to help me revise it and make it as perfect as possible, because I want it to be the best that I can give them.

Reviews

[Traci]

Harrisen I found this to be very authentic, written from the depths of your soul. Your words were honest, and I admire the courage you took to share your thoughts with us, and with your siblings. The love you have for them is beautifully expressed in this poem, one I'm sure they will cherish always, especially when they are older.

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you,
I'm glad that you could see through my poem how I truly feel and yeah it's kinda nerve-wracking to put my own thoughts out there like this, but I believe that my siblings should know how they feel and how they impact my life.

Thankful as ever,
Harrisen

[Traci]

You're welcome. I think many here can relate to the feelings you shared. I agree with Chris, this was written from your heart, it's a very personal poem, and may you find peace and great comfort through your words. Much love to you and your little rascals.

[unsavable_soul]

I think it is perfect Harrisen,it's your heart... and it breaks mine. I have many siblings and we have been scattered throughout our lives. The closeness you have touches me greatly. Harrisen I see in you an amazing person, my personal thought is that you should in this case ask no one else what should come from your heart.
Much love
Chris
P.s. Sorry for the delay, had quite a few requests to get through... still going now.

[Harrisen Viator]

That means a lot to me. I love having the close connection with my siblings, but of course me being ten years older, it'll be difficult to keep the connection. And thank you, I'm glad that you enjoyed it.

[unsavable_soul]

I did as I seem to always do when it comes to your art. Though I was thinking if their ten years younger perhaps you might not want to ingrain suicide in their brains. Just a thought. We are very impressionable in or youth, at least I feel I was. Again only food for thought...
Needless to say I love the piece, you are quite gifted.
Chris

[Harrisen Viator]

You do bring up a point that I have thought about and considered for a long time. I was their age, when I had my first thoughts of not wanting to live and that is something I never want to happen to them. So, although I have written this poem for them I have chosen to keep it from them and my parents for a long while, because I know that they aren't emotionally mature enough to handle that sort of information.
Thank you for your concern.
-Harrisen

[unsavable_soul]

You ever so amazing. I am glad to call you friend. You have a wisdom beyond your years.
Much love.
Chris

[Ees]

I like this! I am a big fan of writing for the younger ones. I like your aim with this piece. I do think that you should go back over it and weed it a little bit. Some of the language that you used has that... ummm, that sound of trying to be a poem, but I think that it could sound even more poem-y if you tried a little less and just pulled some things out. I have no idea if that made any sense to you, but anyway...

I really like the term "rascals". A great group name for younger siblings!
It's great though. It's wonderful to right this sort of thing. You are lucky to have them to love, I think!

[Harrisen Viator]

I'm glad that you liked it! Do you think you could elaborate on what you mean about the language I used?
And thanks again, they're my favorite little rascals! :)

[Ees]

The language comment is hard for me to explain. I don't know that there is an adequate reason.... that makes sense... It is just that in some places your sentences seem to work too hard to get to the point and I think that they might be more effective if you didn't try to... it is a hard thing to explain. If you read the poem a few times to yourself out loud I think that you'll see what I mean.

[Harrisen Viator]

I can see what you mean, but I feel like despite the shortcomings of this poem, it is the most genuine in the point that I'm trying to make. I really am thankful for your review and I'll use it to make sure that my future poems do not have the problems faced in this one.
Thank you,
Harrisen

[Ees]

Oh I deff agree that it is a genuine poem. I just always try to think of some way to improve things as I think that there is usually a way to make a good poem better.

In fact, I don't even bother to read s****y poems past a line or two, and I certainly don't take the time to review them. So if I have reviewed your work, figure I considered it worth the effort and a good poem.

[Harrisen Viator]

Well, thank you. That honestly means a lot to me for you to consider my poem. I'll continually look back on this, to see how I can better improve this one for the future. I'll definitely look at my word choice from now on.

Thank you,
you friend
Harrisen

[Ees]

Hey, no problem. Nice work!

[Rita L. Sev]

Harrisen, in the most important ways, this poem is perfect. You poured your emotions out on the page, both for catharsis and for sharing. What better Muse is there? You could work with the flow/rhyme scheme, but this is the version that will always feel most authentic. You should also know that you have lots of reasons to stick around - those siblings, and a community of writers who are growing to love your work... you have a lot more to give to the world!

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you so much for reading it! And I'm glad that I was able to get my point across for what I was trying to say. And yeah, I do have a lot of reasons for sticking around.
Thank you Rita!

[Terohime]

That poem was so sweet ^^
~Res

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you!! :)

[Charu Charms]

Awww dats cho chweeeeett...! I loved it.

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you! I'm glad that loved it! :)

[LuvdByJesus]

Aww ! I love you too jk ! lol but I think it's great personally, I think for you to pour your heart out like that is good because it helps you to get it off your chest, and you'll know you can say it without critiscm. But hey I've only seen how you are for a few days and you seem really strong so hang in there. Pain may come in the night but joy comes in the morning :)

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you, that makes me feel so much better about this poem. I'm glad that you enjoyed it. And yes it does help to let it out. :)

[LuvdByJesus]

Welcome :)

[Robert Michael Miller J..]

Pretty sad stuff. The only thing I can suggest is to maybe do more planning so you can create a poem that flows a little better. However the emotion keeps you reading in this case, but working on flow can help quite a bit! Thanks for writing :)

[Harrisen Viator]

Yeah, I did realize that it doesn't have that good of flow. I just started writing and just let my pen keep going without out really planning this one out. It just sorta happened. Thank you for your input! I'll try and look over it to see how I can improve the flow.

[Harrisen Viator]

Ignore that 'out' in the middle :P

[A.E. Surdam]

Inspiring and lovely. I too suffer from depression. And I love my younger siblings with everything I have in my heart. This poem is absolutely wonderful. Thank you so much for sharing. :) A magnificent write.

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you so much, I'm so glad that you enjoyed it! Yeah, depression really sucks, but hey at least we have the little ones to brighten our lives :)

[A.E. Surdam]

This is very true. :) It does suck but we do have their love to keep us going.

[shallimarRose]

I think it' s perfect Harrisen, for it was written from your heart.. I don't know if you would want to tell them you think about suicide but as a write here its so heart felt and I could feel every emotion..
xo Rose

[Harrisen Viator]

Well, thank you so much. I just feel like it could be better, because I just want the best for them, even the poetry that I write. And yeah, that's why I want to wait until they are much older and I'll let them know when I wrote it.
Well, I'm glad that I was able to convey the emotions that I felt while writing this. Thank you,
-Harrisen