Hidden

Are you, really you?

Hidden by your desperate lies,

You live this life that you wish you knew.

Take a look in the mirror,

Is the person staring back, really you?

What about them can you relate?

Broken, cold, and empty inside

You project this false reality as your life.

You want to be who you aren't,

You're running, fighting, your past, this strife.

Just be yourself, nothing more,

Don't put up a front or fight any longer.

I hope you listen to this advice,

But figure it out yourself, and become stronger.

Author's Note

Any reviews are welcome, thanks.

Reviews

[Ees]

The second line seems like it could have been written in clearer language. Just a thought, though. You may want to look it over and make sure that it reads as you intended it to.

ahhhh, don't we all want to be who we aren't? Is there really anything we can do? Aren't we all simply who we are?

Nice work. Nice advice. Good job!

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you for your review! Yeah, I can understand how that would be confusing for someone reading it, I'll have to think about ways to revise it.
Thanks,
-Harrisen

[Ees]

Haha, that's why I review! Not to tell anybody what to do, but just to think about it, it's what I try to do when I receive reviews. Anyway, you are welcome and great job!

[Harrisen Viator]

Well, thank you so much! It means a lot and I'll use your review to make myself better.

[Katherine_Richter47]

I like this poem not only does it rhyme an make sense. It brings emotional meaning and personal feeling. Like it a lot!!!

[Harrisen Viator]

Thank you!
I'm glad that you like it!

[Katherine_Richter47]

Welcome!

[Harrisen Viator]

I revised the second line, it used to read, "You live this life you wish you knew."