Spring Rose

Spring Rose

As the hard winter killed the rose,

So even hope and joy died.

Cold unforgiving winds chilled the leaves,

And happiness flew away,

A never-ending loneliness engulfed,

My heart spiraled deeper into the empty pit.

Dead world still spins on.

A smile in the dark,

It fills my heart.

Once again, the pain subsides,

And hope survives.

I feel your warmth.

I smile.

As spring brings new buds,

Our love sows fresh joys.

Once more, the fragrant rose springs forth,

It bursts through with vibrant colors.

So be my love for you,

It's ever growing always showing.

Reviews

[Emily]

What a great first line!!
Keep it up!!

[H.L. Cerveise]

I am glad you liked that line. The first line and the last line came to me before all the rest.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the rose represents love...and harsh winters represent the pain of failed relationships...but spring brings back the flowers and the hope for the heart to rekindle...to find its way back into bloom.

love the construction of this---and the allegory...

such good writing...
j.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I like how summaries of my poems show me I am getting my main point across.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

This is a very praiseworthy poem. The way you talk of the seasons, the flowers, and your ever-growing love is impressive and pleasing to read. The first line signalled that your poem would be confined to the nature, however, the way you introduce your feelings of affection made your poem even more beautiful. Keep writing.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reviewing my poem. I am glad you enjoyed it.

[=]

I find it quite hard to critique this piece, I just found it beautiful.

Also, for some reason, I adore the last line.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading it. I think I wrote the entire poem just for that last line, insert big grin here.

[Hailey Juliet]

I liked the comparison you drew between love and the rose and the conclusion to your poem was very beautiful, "So be my love for you, It's ever growing always showing."

Also your word choices and descriptions were vibrant and make for excellent poetry. Well done!

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reviewing my writing. Yes I love that last line.

[Luisa König]

I really liked this one :) Good job

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed it.

[PoeticSorcery]

it's as if your expressing a light to defeat the darkness in our hearts.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thanks for reading my writing. Yes, there is such darkness within us; however, it can be beaten back by the light within each of us.

[PoeticSorcery]

one can only hope

[William Liston]

This is great. I've only read two poems by you so far, but I can tell that you have skills, especially when it comes to vocabulary. Along with your powerful words, your imagery was simply amazing. I could visualize every line. Great job on this.

-William Liston

[Lydia Shutter]

Even when hearts are cold and winter has set in, the right person can bring the sunshine and warmth. Such a romantic write. I enjoyed the imagery. Lydi**

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you and just to let you know you inspired me to start putting more pictures with my writings. This is what I love about this place we inspire each other to improve our written words.

[Lydia Shutter]

Wonderful! Glad to hear it!