Feedback Echoes?

Feedback Echoes?

I shout out into the dark void!

I cast my tunes out wondering?

My words transmit the pictures.

Mind floats on the notes I hear.

Giving heart rises and falls with the melody.

Great hurts and pleasures flow with the lyrics.

Spirit floats over the waves of light.

Sputtering packets of energy undulate!

Why do my eyes see what others do not?

Waves of endless colors, words and numbers' assault!

Packets of energy assail and pelt me!

Pushing me towards the unknown answers.

Differences and opposites melt into one.

Do I have the right to see this?

Feedback echoes maybe do I hear?

Flowing into my mind, heart and body?

Tell me is this what it all means?

To see the light, the dark and the grays?

Author's Note

I know there are grammar issues with this so need to point them out, lol. Fixing them would have disturbed the flow.

Reviews

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

This is a pretty good composition. "Giving heart rises and falls with the melody.Great hurts and pleasures flow with the lyrics." These lines moved me a lot.
This is a deep poem which raised in your mind some questions which remain unanswered. Very lovely piece. Keep writing.

[Coyote Poetry]

Great thoughts and description in the words.
"Tell me is this what it all means?
To see the light, the dark and the grays?"
The world is many colors and places. We will land in unknown places. Thank you my friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing this writing. This was just something that came to me so strong while listening to some of my favorite tunes. I am glad you liked it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did like it and you are welcome.

[Nessly]

I don't think I can add anything to what others have already said. Great work.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing this poem. I am glad you liked it.

[William Liston]

Very good work. This poem created a "floating" effect that I really can't explain. That's a nice title too.

-William Liston

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my writing. Is the "floating" effect what you feel you get when the lines are shorter?

[William Liston]

Yes, either that, or when the poem is a little abstract and vague, thus creating the aforementioned sensation of "feeling a piece more than understanding it."

[Emily]

Very nice poem!
Keep it up!!