Universe Twine

Universe Twine

One against all,

Darkness crushing and asphyxiating every aspired for hope.

One struggles fruitlessly, never receiving that most wished for.

Wasted rivers of tears flow through a desolate land.

As a candle's flame hidden by the gray fog so be one,

One lonely whirlpool in a vast empty ocean,

The sweet made bitter as poison,

Beauty once found in the rose is now lost.

In the murky ocean, one spies a sweet disturbance in the fog.

Slowly, one cautiously draws nearer.

Wondering one hopes again,

Even so, afraid because one more dashed dream will mean black torture.

To try not could mean to lose that most wished for.

Deep wounds unhealed by the needle of time, become scarlet sore.

Side by side in the restless waters they twirl.

Tenderly, they merge twine.

One is now twine.

All that was still is.

However, what caused one to fall now falls before twine.

Strong be the whirlpool taking in all,

Beauty that always was, can now be seen.

The sweet honey of life frozen by the bitter winds now flows free.

Tears once wasted, now water the seeds of love,

Time failed, but twine reigns triumphant.

Not perfect nor all hoped for.

Nevertheless, now the twine holds strong against the ravages of all,

Shining small yet steady light through the angry gray mist,

Pushing back the crushing walls of the night,

Twine stands against all.

Reviews

[Marianne Rose]

From the depths of darkness to the strength of two forming one strong twined cord that cannot be conquered--you may have shown the agony, bleakness, darkness, but you also showed the strength and resilience - not perfect, but shining small yet steady light. Pushing back the darkness. This is how I feel about my husband and me - facing the world together through many dark nights, because nothing cloud "put us asunder". Not perfect, but yes, the twine can stand against all. Thank you for writing a work I relate to entirely.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I am very glad that related to this writing.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

The depth that lies in your words is unfathomable. You have inter-weaved words, feelings and thoughts in a very lovely manner. Your descriptions- like "the murky ocean"- adorn your piece further. Keep writing.

[H.L. Cerveise]

I am glad you enjoyed this. I really enjoy trying to paint pictures in a reader's mind. Thanks for reviewing this writing.

[Nessly]

Your poems always have such positive themes.

Great write.

[H.L. Cerveise]

I do try to at least end on a positive note. I can not always do that. I am glad you liked this poem. I will give you some read requests that are on the darker side.

[iamshadowine]

your writes are amazing! i really like reading them! incredible work as always!
keep writing :D

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I am glad you like my writings.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a amazing writer. Your words. A wild and worthwhile ride into thoughts and places.
"Beauty that always was, can now be seen.
The sweet honey of life frozen by the bitter winds now flows free.
Tears once wasted, now water the seeds of love,
Time failed, but twine reigns triumphant.
Not perfect nor all hoped for."
The above lines could stand alone. You create place, hard life and solid ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote