Lines of Force

Lines of Force

I see the infinite lines between us, blocking my way.
The lines which all of us have drawn.
Even so, I dimly perceive the ones we are drawing.
My hands take them all and bind them together.
I can feel the unlimited vibrating energy they contain.
With an infinite speed, I fold the lines in half repeatedly. 

Now the limitless lines form an infinitesimal cube.
It shines far brighter than all the stars in the heavens.
A resonating elemental force barely contained lies restlessly in my hand.
I take it, not knowing the outcome and push it into my forehead.
Billions of synapse's fire at once as I consume it.
It resonates within me and becomes me and is me.
Now with only the dark void between us, I reach my hand out.

As our hands touch timeless energy passes between us.
Our fingers entwine as we hold hands and our energies dance.
That which I have absorbed I flow through me into you.
The merged forces mix vibrating, forming something new and unique.
A new pulsation is now added to the forever pulsating cosmos.

Reality grins as it forces our hands apart thus breaking the union.
Our fingers unwillingly untangle and the oneness is broken.
The moment vanishes like mist in the bright morning sun.
All that I have absorbed falls from me racing away into the void.
The unbounded lines once again are between us. 
However, I see new incalculable lines now before me.
I smirk at reality knowing it can interfere, but it cannot stop me.

Reviews

[Zaliodir]

For some reason this poem reminds me of astral projction stories I have read. I don't know if you do such a thing, nor do I even know if its truly possible or not, however when you describe the energy flowing between the two people, it is almost as if they are engergy beings at the time and not in a physical body. I personally believe there resides inside our bodies an energy being, which some call the soul and other call the spirit. If I could describe interactions between spirits it would be exactly as you have described here. Well written, enjoyed it immensely.

[Diamond]

thank you for reading and comprehending it in the right direction. for your question if it is possible. I should say. yes, it is truly possible. and Quandary legend lives on...is an output of such a great bond.

[Diamond]

But one has to look at all the living beings with love and compassion, to have such an experience at some point of their life....for the "life" in one is no different than the "life" in any other one.

[Zaliodir]

Oh wow, that is really neat, I wish my wife and I could connect that way. Very cool.

[Diamond]

Thank you for your response. However I wish append an idea into your statement. Love is the same in any relationship. not just wife and husband. therefore we are expected by the Gods to become the true form of love as our very character. Thank you once again for trying to connect with HL's and my idea.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you Queen for your comment on Wayland's review. I see "ye ken" this writing. I love the Gaelic word ken which means, within the range of what someone knows or understands. The whole idea that we are an energy wave that behaves in a packet like manner is very metaphysical and borders on the edge of quantum mechanics. This is how I often see the world around me.

[Diamond]

HL, wish you had also mentioned that we can raise to that borders only through unselfish thinking and mutual brotherhood towards our fellow beings. I am proud of you HL

[H.L. Cerveise]

Ah, Queen, I always think of that as a given as we learn more about ourselves and the cosmos. How can one not do those things when one achieves "pure consciousness?"

[Diamond]

that is indeed a great thought, however our love also has to extend to those who have not identified "Pure Consciousness" as the true life force. Compassion has no boundary

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe we decide our place and future.
"However, I see new incalculable lines now before me.
I smirk at reality knowing it can interfere, but it cannot stop me."
The above lines are true. One new turn and we are heading to new place and possibilities. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing this writing. I am glad you liked it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did and you are welcome.

[Diane]

I loved the poem! Awesome wording!

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I am glad you love it.

[barleygirl]

This seems to describe an unusual "out there" dance between two people, using imaginary lines of energy attraction as the basis for this ballet. Most of this is interesting & original-sounding, but in a few places, the imaginary aspects seem a little too "out there" to follow with interest & suspended belief. This is the part that is less believable/interesting:

"My hands take them all and bind them together.
I can feel the unlimited vibrating energy they contain.
With an infinite speed, I fold the lines in half repeatedly.

Now the limitless lines form an infinitesimal cube.
It shines far brighter than all the stars in the heavens.
A resonating elemental force barely contained lies restlessly in my hand.
I take it, not knowing the outcome and push it into my forehead."

Trying to decide why this part doesn't appeal to me as much . . . I think it's becuz I don't care for the parts where the narrator is manipulating the energy . . . I prefer the parts where the energy is a free entity, doing what energy does, & having an effect on the narrator. I guess it's a control thing. It's not as interesting when the narrator wants to be in control. It's much more interesting when the narrator surrenders to the energy and we just follow along to see what amazing things happen.

[H.L. Cerveise]

I read this with your ideas in my mind. It would not be hard to have the energy do the things the narrator does. I do like that the narrator is controlling the action. I think I will rewrite it with your approach and post it as a separate poem.

Again thank you so much for your review.

[barleygirl]

I agree, your message can be good either way . . . not to mess with this poem, but trying another approach in a separate poem is a great idea.

[Emily]

Lively poem!
Keep it up!!

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for your review.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

The theme is quite unique and this poem has a peculiar touch of your intelligence which adorns it. The lines you talk of and the force you talk of is simply superb. Keep writing.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for your review. This is how I view a number of interactions I have in this universe. Everything and everybody are a vibrating energy string traveling along a vast wave that is the cosmos we see.

[William Liston]

It's sad that this poem doen't have more reviews. It's great. I liked how this poem metaphysically described touch. It was very nice and descriptive.

-William Liston

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you. I posted this on a blog I have in a virtual world and it was often read and liked. I sent out read requests today to all my friends here so I hope they like it also.

[charlie]

It's a mind boggling thing to learn that we never really touch at all. Well, physically speaking... And yet, we do touch - without contacting - and we feel it.

particles and waves...a true zen riddle