A Winter's Night Sky

A Winter's Night Sky

Orion aims his arrow at the crescent moon.

It's beauty haunts me; however, the distance and cold disturb.

Ah, but I know the stars burn with unquenchable heat.

That while the building blocks of the universe collide.

Each collision is more complex and became the building blocks of us.

Of you and of me, we are made of ancient star dust.

Millions of eons ago we also burned bright in the heavens.

Reviews

[B]

That's very romantic :) and really heart warming

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing this poem. In seeing your review on this one I realized there was no picture on it. Now there is. I am glad you enjoyed it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words.
"Each collision is more complex and became the building blocks of us.
Of you and of me, we are made of ancient star dust."
I liked the above lines a lot. Some collisions are necessary for us to know joy and happiness. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing this writing. I am glad you liked it.

[Coyote Poetry]

I did enjoy and you are welcome.

[Vatsal Rohilla (account..]

This is a pretty good poem. I liked the irony- the cold you feel and the "unquenchable heat" of the stars. Loved the Orion-part. I love watching the night sky and I can see the clear picture in my mind once more. Lovely piece. Keep writing.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing this poem.

[Emily]

Lovely poem!!
I really liked the wording on this one!
Keep it up!

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem. I am glad you like the wording of this writing.

[barleygirl]

There must be a million poems about watching the night skies, but yours is fresh & original & surprising in the way this scenario is described & interpreted. I love the first line, which is brilliant. I also love the way this nighttime scene drifts off into a "creation story" possibly suggesting that we are all part of this graceful night sky and/or we are all connected.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for the review. This writing was born one night during my sky watching. Orion is one of my favorite constellations. That night, it was like he was shooting at the moon.

[Hailey Juliet]

I love this poem!! Probably my favorite of yours that i've read! This line was fantastic,

Orion aims his arrow at the crescent moon.

The image of this is the perfect way to begin this piece. Absolutely brilliant!

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reviewing my poem. That first line came to me in a flash the rest followed so naturally for me. Drawing images in readers' minds and hearts is my biggest goal.

[William Liston]

Nice work. I like how you incorporated science into this poem. Great work.

-William Liston

[Luisa König]

Great metaphor at the end. I really liked it

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading it. It is the last two lines that tie it together. It just makes me feel so connected to the universes when I think I once was a primordial star.

[Luisa König]

It's a very nice thought :)

[iamshadowine]

nicely done, although the picture becomes a little unclear from the fifth line..... keep writing :D

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading it. Sorry if I was unclear, maybe some day, I will have to add a line or two to explain what I was feeling. It just makes me feel so connected to the universes when I think I once was a primordial star. As stars age, they create the heavier elements, when they explode the process starts all over again. Eventually, that matter forms planets then life.

[Diane]

I am not 100 % sure what it is about, but I loved the wording.

[H.L. Cerveise]

Thank you for reading it. If you are thinking, it is about creation and more specifically our creation, if so, yes you are right. I have a poem that shows our creation from a different point of view then this. It is my poem The Depressed Masochist; however, in the end it is still the same.