Just Letting You Know

 

I am just as strong  As you think I am weak It does not matter that actions you take Or the words that you speak You have thought of me as someone to bully Someone one that’s it’s easy to push around But you’ve found out that I am strong Still standing with both feet on the ground Just letting you know That is not about to be changed And if you keep pushing me You will see the monster that will be unchanged Bullies have low self-esteem They feel bad about themselves and bully to feel empowered When in fact they are nothing but obsessive and know no better It makes them feel important, but they are really cowards Bullies love to torment And love to torture and cause trouble But every bully will have his day And someone will pop their bubble

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[XxtaintedxX]

this is SO true

[Silver]

I like how you kind of turn this around on the bully. Great poem, pretty good basis.

The first two lines are amazing. In the third line, I think you met to say "what" instead of "that" In the fourth line, I think it would be better if you got rid of "the" before "words".

In the second line of the second stanza, I think you should substitute "that''s" for "who's" and get rid of "it's". In the third line of the second stanza, you've already established you're strong, so say something like "tough."

Third stanza: Second line, maybe say something like "That's not going to change". Fourth line, say "unchained' instead of "unchanged".

I don't really know what to say about the fourth stanza. It seems kind of forced. I would get rid of it and maybe call them cowards somewhere else.

Fifth stanza is quite good!

In all, I think that this could be a great poem if you changed a few things. Those are just my suggestions. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing!