At night

        At Night

                Shooting from the distance loud enough to wake the dead.

        Old trees crackingand falling from being warn down.

Smoke coming from homes with stoves, darkening the sky.

Doors opening and shutting from people going in and out.

Foot prints in the snow following you home.

Some are you, some are not.

Naying of horses mooing of cows.

Barking of dogs, meowing of cats.

Eye watching and stalking you from a distance, like a predator watches its prey.

        Out of all that only one thing would be dark enough to scare me.

        The dark, empty, quiet road laying under my feet as i walk upon it.

Reviews

[Tony]

The author uses words in a fashion that portrays well the environment of the poem.
I like how effectively I was drawn into this, and left with an unexpected point in the end.
Through writing, you share the beautiful place you live in, and also share a piece of your discontent.
As I have told you before, Kindra, writing is a good form of meditation and therapy.
What I have not told you is that people who have to go through a lot of misery in their lives, often produce the very best of writing.
I would say you have much more to share and I, for one, will be waiting patiently.........

[GTVile]

Wow, that was awesome and unexpected. I can appreciate that fear of the road ahead. At most junctures in my life I've had that feeling that I was being pushed from behind and just barely kept up with the forward momentum being forced upon me. I like the presentation of that principle on the backdrop of all the usual suspects for the causation of fear in the narrator. Very interesting and original technique.

[Constance]

I could certainly feel the mood, and it took me back to late walks I took before, when what was really scaring me was inside. This piece actually made me think far beyond the simple vocabulary, and I saw something very philosophical toward the end. I did notice a typo in the words warn down. Worn, it should be.
A nice write, and just as honest as your other piece. I look forward to reading more.
Constance

[Legion]

Watch out for flying pigs too. Especially if you just washed your car. :)

Good write. Felt the ambience here.