Murmuring Brook

Murmuring brook surrounded by Sun

Chortling over the bird's idle chatter

The nimble squirrels pitter-patter

The Wind dances upon Your ice-clad

Sapphire waters

Creating waves of silvery sheen

Sensuously You wind over the

Curves of the sighing land

Enchanted by Your fairy presence

Illuminated by Sun and

Framed by eerie Winter woods

Murmuring, ever impatient brook

Spreading infectious laughter

Reviews

[edie madison]

i have to agree with the other reviewers, you laid this piece of writing out very well. i can picture everything, you painted the picture very well.

i also like how you capitalized things like "wind", "sun", "winter", etc. it give a certain person-like quality to them and make them seem like actual characters in your poem. nice job!

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Thank You, Edie :) I love personifying things in nature :) And emphasis :D I'm glad You like :)

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Thank You, kindly TImagination :D

[T]

Nice descriptions to this one. I could picture the scene as you laid it out in front of us line by line. Nice!

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Thank You, eversosweetly :) This is much appreciated...I am glad that it does that for You...:D

[eversosweetly]

Very lovely use of sensory images... it creates a beautiful scene in my mind.

"Chortling over the birds idle chatter
The nimble squirrels pitter patter"

These two lines appeal to the senses, making the words leap into my imagination as if I am really there. The sound of the brook combines with the other sounds--the birds, the squirrels leaping through the leaves as the sunlight filters through the branches of trees. Beautiful!

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Insights are always welcome, dearest Serah :) Always :) When You do, do tell :) It is such a beautiful line...

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. ed and oscar wilde have seen the most brutal form of injustice that a man can tolerate with resilience ... just an insight ... you're very welcome ... i shall find out who wrote the brook ... :) ...

[A.A.Romanczuk]

:) It sounds like something Tennyson would write..or Longfellow...but it sounds more like Tennsyon...I truly do not know...Ah ...Oscar Wilde :) Ed too...Ed deserves a sigh :D Oh I adore Wilde to the very boundaries of adoration...perhaps because I adore paradoxes and he is the master of them, in my opinion :) Thank You, Serah :)

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Ahahahah, Yes, indeed, Ed...I think it would be a calming atmosphere for the "I" :)