Monster from within

Intoxicated with memories and pain

The hurt is still there, trapped on the inside like a stain

The cuts scratches and scars remain bloody and unstitched

watch how the juicy red liquid trickles down and drips

 

The emotions seem invisible to the silent face

So full of lies and hatred, is apparently not the case

to be left alone and thrown away is such a burden to bear

All i wanted was to be shown a little care

A little amount of effort would do the trick

but now just being around you, makes me sick

 

The voice i hear that hums those happy songs you sing

Might as well belong to a black widow spider, you suck the life out of everything

Everyone is deceived by what looks like a person so shy and mild

but no one sees what i have known,

that once so loving and simple child,

has been eaten away by the monster she has become

some one who thrives  on getting what she wants and not caring on who is stung

 

I don’t understand where her mind has been

how can someone once so loving turn awful from within

i guess i will never understand why she has turned into this being

But i will always know what she truly is and one day someone else will be doing the freeing

 

Reviews

[eatmills]

There is some really good imagery here. The emotional turmoil really stands out. You missed a word "... looks like person so shy and mild" Should be an a after like.
I loved the line about the spider, very surreal; actually that whole stanza is quite surreal in it's self.

Good write, thanks for the share.

[Captivating Ink]

I loved this...wow. Describing me, actually :)

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A hauntingly beautiful poem that describes the confusion from a descision made from another being. I don't understand either. Humans...go figure. Lovely poem, sad but really nice :)

[KT]

Really great writing here. You write from your heart, which really helps the imagery and emotions that come from this poem. Awesome work.

[Sarah Redigan]

very deep .. hummm, i guess the poems that hit the closest to home are always the ones that can be the hardest to review .. my heart is sore for you if you feel these feelings , i have been in a similar boat and i thought i was going to sink and drowned but my writing saved me ... 100/100

Wow, so nicely done.

.....Awesome rhymes in this write. enjoyed!

[AJ Kristiansen]

Wow! I love this so much Infinity Freedom :) It describes so well what can happen in relationships and how people can appear one thing on the surface but something so very different underneath. You capture that image so well, you do. The pain of loving someone only to have them transform into someone destructive to your soul... very, very hard indeed. Thanks for that fabulous poem, I really loved the language you used, it painted very strong images.

[Imagination-mage]

this was very well written and sad too. I really enjoyed this piece cause it shows what can happen when tainted u thought was ur friend

[Teenage Romeo]

Just wanna say I can completely relate to the first two paragraphs beautiful work

[Aella.lives]

I especially like the first stanza. "The cuts scratches and scars remain bloody and unstitched" I loved the use of 'unstitched' that gave me a real feel for the bloodiness and grossness of this person. I, as well, know people who are exactly as you described in this, hiding behind a demure front. I love this, good write. :)

[Michael of Gilead]

Interesting, sometimes trying to force a rhyming scheme makes for a trite message