Forever Broken

Is it right

to sit and let this die

were slowly letting go

like this storys better untold

I'm sitting here waiting for the sound of the drum

Just waiting for that one day to come

When you both realize how much i'm in pain

With this burden upon my shoulders, driving me insane

I wish you could feel what i am feeling

The hurt and suffering i bear needs reveling

The slow tearing at my heat

With the dripping of its blood beginning to start

I can't believe it got this bad

I can't believe i LET it get like this

I'm angry at myself for letting us drift

I have fought so hard to keep our friendship alive

I'm running out of will, i'm trying to survive

Everyday i try so hard not to think about it, that is my goal

But no matter what i do i come across the memories that seem to burn in my soul

It can't be right

to sit and let this die

We were once so close

we can't let what we had disappear forever

Reviews

[Captain]

Sadly enough, you can and it does. Everyday.
'Captian

[Egoless]

wonderful! this is clearly a very honest, emotional poem. I found it very easy to relate to.

[paradise]

amazing and stunning. You always manage to write so beautifly keep them coming. Your emotions show so much in your poems

[Sweets]

Very touching and honest poem...flows perfectly, very nice

[5minutesofcrazy]

Very touching. I liked the flow of the poem. Very nice.

[Michael of Gilead]

"I wish you could feel what i am feeling"

Yeah, uh huh....thats it, if only.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A trusted piece, it leads the reader down a road to savor! well done, good read.

[rwar ish me]

this is lovely
I really enjoyed this
I can easliy relate to this.
Very nice job
~Amai

[eatmills]

I'm listening to Dead Can Dance while reading this, just added to the ambiance. It's an amazing, powerful piece of emotion.

What the other reviewers are trying to say is to choose a format. I would suggest no capitals, no punctuation and no apostrophes. I would say let the LET stay because it adds a certain volume to your writing.

Write, edit, read, edit, post, read, edit, repost.

[hmm]

well expressed thoughts, deep and emotional.