Forever Broken

Is it right

to sit and let this die

were slowly letting go

like this storys better untold

I'm sitting here waiting for the sound of the drum

Just waiting for that one day to come

When you both realize how much i'm in pain

With this burden upon my shoulders, driving me insane

I wish you could feel what i am feeling

The hurt and suffering i bear needs reveling

The slow tearing at my heat

With the dripping of its blood beginning to start

I can't believe it got this bad

I can't believe i LET it get like this

I'm angry at myself for letting us drift

I have fought so hard to keep our friendship alive

I'm running out of will, i'm trying to survive

Everyday i try so hard not to think about it, that is my goal

But no matter what i do i come across the memories that seem to burn in my soul

It can't be right

to sit and let this die

We were once so close

we can't let what we had disappear forever

Reviews

wow, such a sad piece, but nicely written

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oh my gosh! soooo sad :( i'm more sad for this then my cramped ribs :P i love the rhyming teehee :3

[Hachamecha]

I like it :)

[Aella.lives]

"I can't believe it got this bad
I can't believe i LET it get like this" good wording and rhyme. And like others have said before me, it's a bit heartbreaking. But I feel there is something there at the end of the tunnel. :)

[The White Wolf]

I like how this poem leads you in simply and gently, and then comes into a tempest of emotions, where you are being spun around by the confusion and pain. Only then, to softly set you back down in the wading pool. Very nicely written!

[R J Askew]

Ach, but that is how it goes. First the love dies and then the residal 'friendship' ... quitely, in its sleep. But we find new vigour and go on.

[Kat Wildd]

love the thoughts and emotions you express here...love it

[Backlight Burner]

Sad and heartbreaking, very well done.

[closed..acct]

such a sad write,
i loved the last three lines here.
Quite amazing

[tk]

that's sad and painful. well, that's part of our life.
anyway, you did a great job expressing your thoughts here.
but this piece needs to be edited. it has brilliance in it, yet it needs to be polished. don't take me wrong... :) it is a very beautiful piece.
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