Orchestra's Pride

me being a violinist

Walking on stage with the notes running through my head. My fingers dancing in the air with rememberance of the music i've read.

 Taking my beautifull instrument out of its resting place, Looking at it, so still as it leaves its case.

 When the time comes to ignight its sound, The butterflies in my stomach start to come around.

Making me nervous as we begin to tune. Lights shining down as people start to fill the room.

 The conductor stands strong and tall. Silence begins to fill the music hall

. She raises her baton as we are eger to play. As my bow gracefully glides across my strings, my heart starts racing in a rapid way.

 As we play our last note we stand up with pride.The auidence starts to cheer and  The conductor looks at us with joyous tears in her eyes.

 We know we made her proud. We begin to decend and take our final bow...

Reviews

[Mary Fioratti]

Wow! how beautiful all these feelings in what you wrote. In this piece, I really visualize my daughter playing her violin for so many years... and I could understand a little what she felt. You write very well. And you show your feelings in a clear and sweet way!
*Mary*

[TreeSpirit]

Well done! yet another one that I can relate to ! I played violin for 5 years then guitar for 3 and alto sax for 3 years and of course I sing. How long have you played?

[Kloverfield]

Wow, you've captured the moment wonderfully. As a performer myself, I know exactly how this feels and you have described it perfectly. Everything to the font and the form of the poem speaks about the experience. Perfect snapshot, even for those who are in other forms of performance, like band or choir. There were spelling errors, beautiful, ignite, eager, descend, but those are minor and don't hinder the piece at all.

[Livana Lowell]

Dear Beautifully Imperfect,

Well, it has a lot of grammar and spelling errors, but I am not sure if you want me to point those out.

Oh man, I am an aspiring violinist and this gave me in depth, allowing me to see a part of my future. I love the violin and I love music. I can't wait to experience something like this. You should draw this out; it has a beautiful central idea. Describe the instrument; it is lovely. The orchestra too is beautiful, a choir of instruments and notes. The instrument was still in its case, but now animate with music.

It is a wonderful thing to make a person feel with music. I wish to do that too. This poem inspires me to become better and work harder.

Overall, it's good.

Sincerely Livana Lowell (LL)

God bless

[raindroplove]

beautiful i play the saxaphone in a consert band so i know how it is you captured it perfectly

[paparapapa]

I'm envious! I want to experience that feeling! Haha. But since I don't have time to learn violin now, I guess I'll just settle with my future child being in an orchestra! Hahaha. Such a long way to go. Anyway, I loved how you described the feeling perfectly. It makes some readers like me who hasn't experienced this relate to a very beautiful moment. Just a little something though, go over it a few times and polish it some more. There are some words that were spelled incorrectly, so better edit some more. Other than that, great write! ;)

[13ReasonsWhy]

Wow!! You've captured every feeling. I play piano I really can relate to this. It's beautiful.

[futurepast.]

I guess we have all experienced moments like this ~ having butterflies in the stomach and the feeling of relief and pride when it is over. You have beautifully narrated this experience through every little details and still make them rhyme. Good job.

[idk]

Great readd

[Viet Pham]

Well written poetry, I real like the feel of the story.