The Dark Waters, They Eat Me Alive

The darkness has gotten a hold of me once again.

I wasn't strong enough and there were no soldiers to help me fight this war.

This time, I've been nailed to the cold, dead, abandoned, ground.

The incoming winter wind sent shivers down my bare back.

I saw the goose bumps form on my arms and legs.

The pointless tears that run down my face, do not matter,

The scars that are open and bleeding profusely do not matter.

The countless hours I spend thinking, alone, outside at night, do not matter.

The wall that was put between us eventually was torn down, but to my dismay, I was the only one that had been fighting.

The darkness that dwelled inside me was taken away, but only to be shoved back down my throat.

There was no stopping it, know what to have seen it coming.

 The dragon tried to warn me, he tried to show me my stupidity before it was to happen but I was careless.

I let my fear, and everything I was holding onto, everything that kept me from loving again, go.

 I walked up to the cliff that I had once fallen off of,  stared down at the sharp rocks and the rushing falls that were visible below, and threw all my precautions and fears out into the wind.

Unfortunately, I fell again.

I was slammed against the rocks and they slashed my back.

I skid across the ledges and tore up my chest.

I hit the water hard and sunk like a stone.

I am desperate for air but I just sink deeper and deeper until I’m unable to see the surface.

Forever trying to obtain just the slightest bit of oxygen, trying to fill my airless lungs.

Reviews

[Patrick O'Neil]

Wow, intense and dark. Seems like there is more to the story than meets the eye.. leaves me wondering what will happen now?. Great write.

[Mark Anthony Games (Hum..]

Raw, passionate, honest and striking, Very brave and couragous write. Thank you for writing this.

[Tazz S.H.]

Wow. o_o
that reminds me of this poem I wrote a while ago..but it had a different ending. I'll publish it soon so you can see it. it's called "Rainstorm".

[Writer *78*]

This sounds like a continuation of your other dragon poem that you put up a few weeks ago. Very Impressive work to say the least.

[quinfinn]

this is utterly sensational writing. i am deeply moved by your words. well done!

[Damien Davison]

Very well done. I thought is was a great writing, one I enjoyed reading. Darkly beautiful, well done.

[Vertigoingnowhere]

thank you!
-High School

[Calibaster]

you don't need a comma after face. That was awesome! Encore encore!

[Vertigoingnowhere]

thanks you!
-High School

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem young lady. The powerful description create some wild visions. No weakness in the poem. Each additional line made the poem stronger. I like the strong ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Vertigoingnowhere]

thanks you!
-High School