Love Hidden In October

It seems as if October snuck up on me. I was so lost in my pathetic August daydreams when suddenly i felt the cool, crisp, Autumn air brush against my face with a bittersweet greeting. I opened my eyes to see the trees smoldering with all shades of orange, yellow, and red. I pulled on my sweat shirt and my old ripped up jeans and buried my face in my thoughts. The fall air sent me into shivers. Then he came along. It felt as if, all at once, the darkness that would swallow me whole, never exsisted. He saw my scars that looked so gruesome, at least to me they did. He did not flee, he did not cringe, he simply scooped me up off of the cold, forsaken ground and carried me out of the darkest cave. He set me down under a tree surrounded by soft, green grass that swayed with the wind. He took a look at my damaged heart. It was covered with cuts, scratches, scars, and stitiches that have a history of tearing from my flesh. I was about to apologize for my broken smile when he grabbed my face and kissed me hard. At first I hesitated. My fears were being awoken, but as he held me in his arms, I felt myself letting go. Letting go of any and all fears of loving again. Letting go of all the pain and sorrow that used to dwell within me. The darkness that once consumed me disinigrated. I gave in and let myself love. As he continued to hold me, as he continued to kiss me, I could feel myself repairing. Then the world melted away.

Reviews

[Faffy]

loving the imagery here!
I opened my eyes to see the trees smoldering with all shades of orange, yellow, and red. I pulled on my sweat shirt and my old ripped up jeans and buried my face in my thoughts. The fall air sent me into shivers. Then he came along. It felt as if, all at once, the darkness that would swallow me whole, never existed"

i love the way you build emotion and atmosphere, you have a real ability to bend and control language

a truly "magical" and loving piece

well done =)

-Roshan

[Vertigoingnowhere]

oh my gosh?! are you serious?

[Faffy]

of course i am, why do you sound so surprised?

[Vertigoingnowhere]

lol i dunno haha

[Faffy]

haha well if youre surprised that you write really well you shouldnt be =P

[Vertigoingnowhere]

really?

[Faffy]

yes, really =)

[Vertigoingnowhere]

why thank you sir :)

[The Dreamer]

beautiful :) and let me tell you - i LOVED those lines:
He took a look at my damaged heart. It was covered with cuts, scratches, scars, and stitiches that have a history of tearing from my flesh. I was about to apologize for my broken smile when he grabbed my face and kissed me hard.

[Vertigoingnowhere]

i wasted a beautiful piece on this boy

[Writer *78*]

Nice imagery here impressive and conveying emotion within perfect.

[Tazz S.H.]

This is really deep, you have talent :)

[by Lauren]

I've heard it said that feeling the change of seasons is like falling in love again, and I think we can all relate to that. You chose a major heart theme (love) which all great authors are smart enough to use -- so keep writing! This is good.

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This is beautiful! It gives you a great image of the scenery. Very picturesque.

[Vertigoingnowhere]

aw thanks

[LaurenMarie]

Beautiful!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very nice tale of healing. I like the way you led the reader to the positive ending. I like the description. Gave life to the story. Thank you for sharing the excellent story.
Coyote

[Vertigoingnowhere]

thanks :)

[Calibaster]

great descriptions, especially the word smouldering.

[Hachamecha]

It's great. The feelings aer conveyed in a special way, and it's the kind of thing that makes you want to go "awwww' at the end. I felt 'love,' who was thrown in the trash can, flowed through the blood again.
Keep writing~