The Eyes In My Nightmares

Deep in the core of my soul

The only thing on my mind at that particular moment was simply...run. It didn't matter where I went. It didn't matter how far I went. All that mattered was surviving. It was extremely difficult to see, it was so dark. The forest I had taken refuge in was dense and cold. It was the middle of winter. All I could hear was it's heavy footsteps not to far behind me, my exhausted breath, and the fast, loud beating of my heart. I could feel the adrenaline pulsing through me. I was sure about only a few things; there was no slowing down, there was no stopping and there was no turning back. If I were to slow my pace, even for a little bit, I would be done for.  I felt like i had been running for ages. My legs were burning and my throat was incredibly dry. Then, my worst fear was upon me, there had been a hole, I didn't see it. I tripped and fell to the ground. I tried to let out a scream but there was no sound. When I turned around I froze. I felt like I had been nailed to the ground. I was staring directly into the horrifying yellow eyes of the monster that dwelled in my nightmares.

Reviews

[eatmills]

Great cliffhanger! Now I have more stuff to ponder on.

[Michael of Gilead]

And it was called Monday morning.... ;)

[Vertigoingnowhere]

bahahaha well done

[Michael of Gilead]

;)

[lost girl]

running running running...its seems we as women are always running. As a mother of 7, I can say...bend down and tie your shoe strings straight away, always watch were you step, whistle while you work ( increases lung strength, preserves oxygen)keep the underneath of your bed free from all debris(it causes nightmares) (old wives tale)keep visine handy when on outdoor adventures,especially in the woods( apparently your creature may need some too- yellow eyes EEK!!) (yellow is the color of fear you know...maybe it is as scared of you!lol)keep breath mints always in your pocket. Yellow eyes= certainly horrid breath too. Most importantly...never stop writing...but maybe someday you will quit running :)

[Vertigoingnowhere]

you are adorable :)))

[Crystal K]

Awesome read. I wanted the story to keep going I was so in to it

[quinfinn]

wow, talk about anti-climactic! what a fierce write. i would love to someday read the prologue. a little gentle coaxing here...more, please? finish what you started...

[Vertigoingnowhere]

you really think its that good?

[quinfinn]

i really, sincerely do!

[Vertigoingnowhere]

what about it is so inviting?

[quinfinn]

simple, you pulled me in with very descriptive and compelling action and made the monster real, but left me hanging at the end. in movies and tv...this is what's known as a spellbinding cliffhanger.

[Vertigoingnowhere]

wow

[quinfinn]

yep!

[Vertigoingnowhere]

ignore the grammer issues, i was in a rush