Valley of shadow and doubt

Playing with the ten-syllable word count again.

 

 

 

 

 

I saw thousands upon thousands of souls.

 

A guillotine was our only parole.

 

We were in line because of no way out.

 

"Lord your will shall be done!" we cry and shout.

 

In this hour we become martyrs and saints.

 

The weak of heart prayed, and then we would faint.

We shook

and whimpered

before we died.

 

Faithful believers, piled up like the tide.

 

The rapture came a day too late for us.

 

 

Being judged by a dark world made church-less.

 

One by one

large blades severed our voices.

 

I was here...

because of Godly choices.

 

 

 

Author's Note

I felt compelled to write about a dream I had a few months back. My subconscience is often plagued with religious fear that was often engrained into me as a child. I will confess to believing in God. But why do I fear? Perhaps that was the purpose of this vision "dream"....to shake me during a moment of doubt. I say vision because this is not the first...I doubt it will be the last....meaning it's nolonger a dream when it comes to past.

Reviews

[roarke]

dreams can be great structures for writes, if you can wrangle them. There's clarity in some form of mystical allegory, but not for the conscious wakening. As subconsciously inspired as this was, you've crafted it into a solid prose that serves to illustrate to it's readers.

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Muse,

Elogantly Beautiful

Always,

Matthew
A.

[Tomi]

That is some dream you had. I too was motivated to serve God by Fear of Damnation. I was frightened by rapture, Hell, apocalypse and all that.Now, i've come to an understanding of God's love...If my advice is worth anything at all, I'd say you should study more about his Love and less about the consequences of Sin or whatever. Our subconscious is built by what we feed our minds with. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem.The very last line is a Banger! Brilliant! thanks for sharing your subconscious and this amazing piece of literature...

[Robin]

dreams , the intangible - touching you

[Ruth]

Indeed, to shake it off and open doors...fear is what mainstream religion wants...keeps people in their places, so to speak.

As always, damn poignant piece, love your work xoxo

[kublakhan27]

Incredible, and I sympathize totally with much of what you're saying...love the second line, but this is full of great lines...well done Muse :)

[I, Rene]

You can not believe in one with out believing in the other, and no matter what side you stand on, no matter which divide is drawn with the long white line of chalk, one side will always fear the other to retain balance.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

My dear muse...you may have been beheaded at the inquest in a past life...or worse..
or burnt to a stake..
but you are just fine as you are now...a Rosy red Cherry on this lifetime's vegetarian barbecue steak.

[Poetic Justice]

is this the perception of God through His eyes or of man and his compelled guilt to fear a God which has stated so many times that He is love.. we nurture fear because it is a form of control. the best form of control..I dont decipher dreams but this sounds like fear.

[Muse]

It is a legit fear....I was thumped hard in the head with the bible growing up. Bits and pieces of it I still cling to in fear of what the consequences might be if I decide to let go.

[Poetic Justice]

I gave up organised religion years ago. Brought up roman catholic but let it go along with the fear and guilt. Have my own faith now based on spiritual logic :)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Now that was one wicked dream... sometimes we making great sacrifices in the name of doing what is right. It is like we have to lose in order for humanity to win.

[Muse]

I wanted to find a pic of a line of people on the mountain side...because thats where I was...the edge of the cliff...easier to decapitate by the edge of a cliff...clean up made easy. God I know that's morbid as hell....but this dream shook the core of me. It was just that real to me.