Precious Things....

If this makes you sick...then there is hope for humanity.

 

 

Shhh

innocence will

 

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p

 

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 BE STILL 

my child.
Let me remind you,

what is spoken and said.
Your hopes and dreams,
they must be bled.

 

Be a good little Girl,

who loves me back,

as I pretend to care.

Your dress is all filthy,

with lice in your hair.

 You've left me,

 a disgusting mess.

I'll wash out the vomit.

A dirty mouth

 needs Bleach,

 and a good dose of Comet.

 

It's okay my darling.
You'll heal with the pain.
FEEL

this needle and thread.
My precious...

precious thing.

 

You need a hug?

Here's a good squeeeeeeze.

 

Soft skin and bones,

to love and to hold.

Why do you wrestle?

We need to

cut/deep,

don't put up a tussle.

Purge and be empty,
only guilt can you keep.

 

 

** Shhhhh **

Don't cry....
peace be with you.
It's just the skin peeling back.

Your world will
feel safe, when it finally
converts BLACK.

 

 

Author's Note

Please don't pass judgement on me. My inspiration is sincere, even if it's a bit dark for some. My daughter was very ill recently, and I was sleeped deprived on top of it all. I could not stand looking at her, she looked so ill, and she was desperate to feel better. And for some reason or other; I started thinking about the Mothers that harmed their own children on purpose....to get attention. Better known as Munchausen Proxy Syndrome. It made me SICK, thinking about it. This writing came from these thoughts, and from my own broken child hood. I often feel like the little girl being sqeezed to death in this picture. There are so many forms of abuse out there. And I think this form of abuse is the sickest of them all. It's both emotional and physical. FYI, my daughter is well now, but it was a week of ugly emotions for me.

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

I too am a father,
I understand the mentality behind this. I also see a bit the true darkness within. Not to say you would harm your child or any child, but as to say there are those you would harm if the reasons were right or the time appropriate. I am impressed at how freely you throw yourself into the arms of your concept. You truly exist within it even if only temporarily, I can't say how temporarily. No, that's a piece for another time. I see a 2... 3... 4... sliding into a five. This is ever so haunting. thanks for the suggest I love it.
Sincerely
Christopher

[unsavable_soul]

P.s. Loving this line for the sheer grit, literally.

"A dirty mouth
needs Bleach,
and a good dose of Comet."

You sicken me, in all the right ways.
Chris

[Muse]

ache...she pushed me over the edge two years ago with a mystery illness...I was starting to get scared that the school might start accusing me of something terrible. With sleep deprivation..worry...it inspired this dreadful writing.

[Muse]

I consulted with a friend before sharing this...I was scared of being judged.

[unsavable_soul]

This I greatly understand,
But someone wise recently told me to push the envelope. I agreed and the result I dare say is TRUE ART. Always in love with your works thus far.
Sincerely
Chris

[Loney tunes]

this is completely darkside, but i love it

[Coyote Poetry]

I'm glad your daughter is doing well. Our kids are our life. The poem had to be read a few times. The artwork made the poem have life and create sadness with your powerful words. Your strong description made the scene have life. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[RJM]

I think you really captured the essence of Munchausen, where the family or the abuser picks someone from their family to receive "healing" in order for the abuser/s to feel that they too are getting better. The deep feeling of shame and need of cleansing deeply reverberates through your whole work. Well thought of poem in my opinion and just full of emotion. Great work

[Tom C]

I was a bit confused on this one. Sounds like there are deep feeling of shame that need cleaning.

[Ruth]

It takes compassion and intelligence to create a piece a work like this love and you have done so really well with conviction!
This is a chilling piece of work and makes the reader feel so many things...such sadness and distaste for such a thing, I shall never understand some things in life! And if a poet can get messages out there, then that is wonderful! What are words for? :)
Your poem is thought provoking and hits hard love, great job :)
I am glad your daughter is well now :) xoxo

[Enigma]

It was scary. I did not know about this disorder. Needless to say, its shocking how a parent can be the one causing harm to her own kids.

A well crafted poem.

[VelvetRosetta]

Honestly...I know what you mean when saying to dark for some...this is a very intense piece...something that is horrid but at the same time you captured it so well...I loved the way you wrote this and if it hadn't been for the reasons you did..I would have thought you just wrote a chilling and creative piece...but in knowing your heart and emotions went fully into this, only makes it that much more wonderful!
Sorry for what you have gone through, but in reality it want doesnt break us...makes us who we are now!

[Viper]

such an interesting...topic.

Though disturbing, this gets the mind working. It's almost creepy the way you pull a reader in.....I like that about your writing.

[MichaelsLyric.com]

Very vivid piece.

[Shy Girl]

Got the chills from this one...bad. Don't know how they can EVER harm a child in such a manner. That has always amazed me, innocence taken, nurtured never, loved by none, awful life, don't want to wake up again to the same thing the next day. Brought those feelings home. I wish peeps were more aware of just how badly they scar those they are supposed to love unconditionally. I am every so happy your little is feeling better. FYI, good poets don't get judged, they are simply great word artists who speak plainly. :) That's you.