Precious Things....

If this makes you sick...then there is hope for humanity.

 

 

Shhh

innocence will

 

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 BE STILL 

my child.
Let me remind you,

what is spoken and said.
Your hopes and dreams,
they must be bled.

 

Be a good little Girl,

who loves me back,

as I pretend to care.

Your dress is all filthy,

with lice in your hair.

 You've left me,

 a disgusting mess.

I'll wash out the vomit.

A dirty mouth

 needs Bleach,

 and a good dose of Comet.

 

It's okay my darling.
You'll heal with the pain.
FEEL

this needle and thread.
My precious...

precious thing.

 

You need a hug?

Here's a good squeeeeeeze.

 

Soft skin and bones,

to love and to hold.

Why do you wrestle?

We need to

cut/deep,

don't put up a tussle.

Purge and be empty,
only guilt can you keep.

 

 

** Shhhhh **

Don't cry....
peace be with you.
It's just the skin peeling back.

Your world will
feel safe, when it finally
converts BLACK.

 

 

Author's Note

Please don't pass judgement on me. My inspiration is sincere, even if it's a bit dark for some. My daughter was very ill recently, and I was sleeped deprived on top of it all. I could not stand looking at her, she looked so ill, and she was desperate to feel better. And for some reason or other; I started thinking about the Mothers that harmed their own children on purpose....to get attention. Better known as Munchausen Proxy Syndrome. It made me SICK, thinking about it. This writing came from these thoughts, and from my own broken child hood. I often feel like the little girl being sqeezed to death in this picture. There are so many forms of abuse out there. And I think this form of abuse is the sickest of them all. It's both emotional and physical. FYI, my daughter is well now, but it was a week of ugly emotions for me.

Reviews

[unsavable_soul]

I too am a father,
I understand the mentality behind this. I also see a bit the true darkness within. Not to say you would harm your child or any child, but as to say there are those you would harm if the reasons were right or the time appropriate. I am impressed at how freely you throw yourself into the arms of your concept. You truly exist within it even if only temporarily, I can't say how temporarily. No, that's a piece for another time. I see a 2... 3... 4... sliding into a five. This is ever so haunting. thanks for the suggest I love it.
Sincerely
Christopher

[unsavable_soul]

P.s. Loving this line for the sheer grit, literally.

"A dirty mouth
needs Bleach,
and a good dose of Comet."

You sicken me, in all the right ways.
Chris

[Muse]

ache...she pushed me over the edge two years ago with a mystery illness...I was starting to get scared that the school might start accusing me of something terrible. With sleep deprivation..worry...it inspired this dreadful writing.

[Muse]

I consulted with a friend before sharing this...I was scared of being judged.

[unsavable_soul]

This I greatly understand,
But someone wise recently told me to push the envelope. I agreed and the result I dare say is TRUE ART. Always in love with your works thus far.
Sincerely
Chris

[Damien Thibodeaux]

I have not read this one before. You know I love your work and this is one of the reasons why. This should make the reader sick and you accomplished that goal. You tackle controversy and the darkside of human behavior like a true artist. You stir feelings in me with everything you write.

["Fanatical Dreamer"]

I'm a mother of a little girl so this was a bit difficult to read,meaning you did a great Job with expressing this child's pain. You create an image very well.Thanks for sharing your talent with us!

[Muse]

Thank you for that review, and yes it was a painful write...but it came from the inner core of me...my inner child wrote this...and as a mother, I could see it from both perspectives.

[captain]

It's a painful sight. It's like I am feeling the pain too together with the child. It gives a horror feel to it on which you have done in poetic form. You are incredible to portray some dark emotions. No judgement here, for i know this is fiction. Releasing your stress in a creative way brings great writes just like this piece.

[Adam was here]

Woof this almost too dark for this old lad. You write dark and with true talent.

[Moflo]

Brilliantly put together, described profoundly, and gets right at the emotion of every reader. This piece flows flawlessly, its a great model of emotion. Very nice work Muse. I hope your daughter is better soon.

[Muse]

She's been well for several months now. Thank you. :))

[Moflo]

Glad to hear that! :) And not a problem!

[David Scott]

No judgement here. If you can fathom great pain then you can know great healing. Where the soul has been in darkness the smallest light is heaven. People who do not deal with this pain do not understand that it will not go away if you just don't talk about it. Pain will hold you down and force itself on you again and again until you set it out into the light. Now everyone can see it. You can walk around it to look at it and see that "it" is not sho you are. That you still exist separate, strong, breathing, loving despite what "it" has done to you. It is kind of like going to AA. "Hello, I'm... and I have pain". The first and most repeated step to recovery. I hope you child never ever suffers again, but if she does, she will have a knowing and understanding mother to hold her.
Couragous!

[Some John]

Amazing, WOW
Very powerful, it squeezed my spine, made it hard to breathe a-little.
I cannot judge if what you write about is right or wrong, nor will I! As long as writing it helped you in some way or another, that's what counts.
Thank you for the entertaining read

[Sami Khalil]

You have captured the feelings marvelously and shed a special light on this condition...
Thank you for sharing...

[Muse]

Even the most loving Mother's can think dark thoughts when being physically and emotionally challenged I'm afraid.

[Sami Khalil]

I agree ... Thanks for sharing...