The Last Waltz

Dance with the macabre.......

 

 

The Last Waltz

 

Seduced I am by the face of vanity and disfigurement, my

jaw shattered from the {BONDAGE}

of our osculation, my

mouth leeched by sharpened tongue exhausted in salutation.

You play my ribs as if I were the

=strings= on your cello,

but these bones crumble as you strum

higher and higher, my

voice and screams you use to orchestrate Death's choir. 

 

Our diaphragms making love in perverse disagreement, I

ask thee to have mercy on my soul that begs to breathe.

I know your cadaverous mind can see

and hear me, but

instead, you stifle my vitality, ignoring each and every plea.  

 

What provokes you to graze in my dismantled flesh?

Is it the promenade between my stomach and breast, or

do you crave the vigor that hides within 

my open chest?

I waltz with you in servitude and as a willing sacrifice, you

take the lead with every step, twitch,

and pulsating beat.

Catching me as I sway, arching my back, and vertebrae,

bleeding jewel-like rubies, adorning my fears from yesterday.

 

Sweeping me around the tempest void that shadows song.

You devour what is left; I feel no pain......

I feel no wrong.

Author's Note

Artist.......Michael Hussar

Reviews

[J.V. Stanley]

Hauntingly seductive, the words play well upon my ear as I read it aloud. Feels like love torn apart and the empty shells, skeletons remain playing to each other still with the devouring love and that power that holds upon the woman. It seems as though the male figure has a sort of power over the female counterpart within this piece and how weak and vulnerable she is to the seductive techniques used by the male figure.

Our diaphragms making love in perverse disagreement, I
ask thee to have mercy on my soul that begs to breathe.

These lines cause me to imagine an argument between two lovers who constantly seem to quarrel and no matter how much the female in this piece begs for reprieve, none is given ultimately ending with-

You devour what is left; I feel no pain......
I feel no wrong.

in essence succumbing to the fact that he had won, yet inside is strongly convinced of her rightness but no longer willing to argue about it. At least this is how I interpreted the poem. Ultimately its an amazing piece of work, quite amazing in its structure. I have a fascination with dark poetry such as this. Definitely going into my favorites. I had to reread it about five times and enjoyed it more and more with each read :)

[FireWoman]

It reads very well flowing as a macabre cadence that entices the dark part of the
psyche. A beautiful bleeding of expression

[Kaylor Mason]

This is incredible! I love this poem :) (The picture at the top is pretty cool, too, and fits the verse perfectly)

[light and ashes]

Wow Muse this is an intense and brilliant write.

[SpokenWord]

Muse... What inspired you to write this?

Many parts of this sounds like how I feel and what I have said to other people in regards to my own relationship uniqueness. I really like this write and you always come up with something this is just on a Masters level not only with your skill but with your subjects and knowledge of them. The life I have now with my girlfriend is a dance just like this that highly emotionally charged as we dip our minds and bodies into forbidden realms where lines are blurred and reformed into joy. I often look at her and wonder how she enjoys to dismantle me and remake me into something new and improved. Your words are powerful as through this dance you explore the dynamic between two that break the norm of society and dare to step out to be different in the way they relate to each other.

So much I want to write but this one hit to close to my reality to expose all that it hit within me. Excellent write - Bravo

[An owl on the moon]

A write so full of devouring passion, dark and hungry. Your words bring alive a mystery with a screaming, shadowed sensuality buried deep in the psyche. You certainly know how to dance...

[Becky C Strukamp]

It reads very well, its an incredible write. The structure looks fine to me, as if you intended it. It worked out. I know formatting can be an issue, as it has happened to me time and time again. Your words capture so evoke so many emotions. You have your reader spellbound to the end. Wonderful write.

[Bill Grimes Jr.]

So deep, complex, and surreal......beautiful work my friend.

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

Wow. The format seems to have worked well for this, no complaints on that. The darkness and emotions in this piece was a bit mindblowing and seductive to the read - couldn't take my eyes away. Powerful. Wonderfully written. Great write!

[Lily Mae]

I can't imagine the formatting being any better:) I told you, your a Poetess through and through.. Your unique style and intense subject matter has us all waiting and wanting more...xo

[Viper]

This is fresh and intriguing, not to mention very intense.

The words are sharp and crisp, they cut deep into the soul of the reader. Forcing a deep gaze into the eyes of darkness, as the blade twists emotion and fear well into the mind.

I have to say this is my favorite work by you this far.....but I see you are honing your writing skills to a razor sharp edge. I expect all will be very entertained with writings to come and we are looking forward to it!