The Last Waltz

Dance with the macabre.......

 

 

The Last Waltz

 

Seduced I am by the face of vanity and disfigurement, my

jaw shattered from the {BONDAGE}

of our osculation, my

mouth leeched by sharpened tongue exhausted in salutation.

You play my ribs as if I were the

=strings= on your cello,

but these bones crumble as you strum

higher and higher, my

voice and screams you use to orchestrate Death's choir. 

 

Our diaphragms making love in perverse disagreement, I

ask thee to have mercy on my soul that begs to breathe.

I know your cadaverous mind can see

and hear me, but

instead, you stifle my vitality, ignoring each and every plea.  

 

What provokes you to graze in my dismantled flesh?

Is it the promenade between my stomach and breast, or

do you crave the vigor that hides within 

my open chest?

I waltz with you in servitude and as a willing sacrifice, you

take the lead with every step, twitch,

and pulsating beat.

Catching me as I sway, arching my back, and vertebrae,

bleeding jewel-like rubies, adorning my fears from yesterday.

 

Sweeping me around the tempest void that shadows song.

You devour what is left; I feel no pain......

I feel no wrong.

Author's Note

Artist.......Michael Hussar

Reviews

[J.V. Stanley]

Hauntingly seductive, the words play well upon my ear as I read it aloud. Feels like love torn apart and the empty shells, skeletons remain playing to each other still with the devouring love and that power that holds upon the woman. It seems as though the male figure has a sort of power over the female counterpart within this piece and how weak and vulnerable she is to the seductive techniques used by the male figure.

Our diaphragms making love in perverse disagreement, I
ask thee to have mercy on my soul that begs to breathe.

These lines cause me to imagine an argument between two lovers who constantly seem to quarrel and no matter how much the female in this piece begs for reprieve, none is given ultimately ending with-

You devour what is left; I feel no pain......
I feel no wrong.

in essence succumbing to the fact that he had won, yet inside is strongly convinced of her rightness but no longer willing to argue about it. At least this is how I interpreted the poem. Ultimately its an amazing piece of work, quite amazing in its structure. I have a fascination with dark poetry such as this. Definitely going into my favorites. I had to reread it about five times and enjoyed it more and more with each read :)

[Ruth]

Darkened sensual and good to read you hon :) Packs a punch...macabre with a flare....left a few tingles ♥

[wordman]

loved this seductive write and the waltz as you move from enotion to emotion

[Mark]

Quite the dance between the dark and the erotic. You say waltz, feels more like a tango to me. Interesting, seductive, with a hint of the night. Well done.

Mark

[icelandicblue]

To dance this devil's dance in each excruciating kiss, bend and touch is one of the most haunting eternities I have yet to encounter. Humanity has left the premises but the devil plays on.

[Eagle Cruagh]

I speed read your poem---- to read it slowly would have
been tempting fate--- it takes so little for my motor to
race.
Excellent writing, a terrific imagination and the verbage
is exquisite.
Thank you,
---- Eagle Cruagh

[Lyn Anderson]

I am never disappointed when I pop in. I can't believe it took me so long to find you. Your words are powerful, presentation intriguing, your talent immense.

[labyrinthapathy]

I'm left in awe of arousal. You've captured a relationship in words I feel that many have trouble with; lovingly dark and submissive. I even hear an orator in my mind. The words come out articulate and soft. The word choice, the emphasis, and the styling are all immaculate to me. Simply put, I adore this very much.

[Lucifer Jones]

Leave it to me to be aroused by this piece... It's incredibly sensual in a raw and haunting... a terrifying way. Terror at how powerful forces in this universe can be and how helpless we can be in their grip. Thank you for sharing!

[Muse]

I took a stab at writing a macabre inspired romance. I think it was successful??

[Lucifer Jones]

Very much so!

[Plume de flamme]

A very very graphic piece. The flow is superb. Excellent, Muse. Thank you.

[wordwarrior]

This is dark and haunting and the ending makes it very beautiful. Love these lines especially...I waltz with you in servitude and as a willing sacrifice, you

take the lead with every step, twitch,

and pulsating beat.....
Very strong and intense thought here with your words dancing across the page in a mildly macabre manner. Yet just as I feel this is being tossed into a darkness from which there is no return, you use your inner voice to express that you accept and can't help falling into this situation. There are feelings of vulnerability throughout, then a strong voice surges through, unable and not wanting to release yourself from this bind.
A marvellously dark poem.