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 Masculine hands, with muscular limbs

 

                        tongue tied and beautifully hung, you  

 

                            fell victim to my selfish bliss, finally

 

                   trapped by my love that was woven and spun, I

 

         caught you within my web of silkened sheets

 

              held in bondage to be my dessert, your

 

                         martyred lips are mine alone to unravel, I'll

 

                         kiss it all better, never mind it might hurt

 

                                each gasp for breath shows your unrest

                    

                sorry my love for the tangled up mess

 

                            your chest cocooned within my embrace, its

 

                              pointless to fight the blackwidows fate, 

 

                    I'll eat you up slow.....

 

                  starting first, with your sweet decadent face.

 

Reviews

[EMF]

I have nothing against a little B&D. Even a little S&M. Willing to explore many other letters too, but this takes it to such a wonderfully new level... Oh. Yes. Sorry, I'm back and not behaving any more. You have created here a true lure, that keeps mine eye's returning again and again. Partly because of the sheer quality of it. The texture of the language has a silken sensuality and sexuality of it that holds you. And frankly, I'm turned on something rotten by it. As I said befoer..... way down to the marrow

[fitz Roberts]

I love the spin you have here with more than black widows mating habbits review for a review like a secret picture swap quid pro quo. I see what you mean by sexy and demented I love how your work here is beautifully hung but in my face for this poem you'll find no distaste

[Muse]

I approve of your review, very witty and charming. Thank you. :)

[Rick Puetter]

ear Muse,

It's been some time since I reviewed one of your works. Glad I stopped by.

I think you capture the essence of the spider here. We see the torment of the captive, yet the lure that captured him makes him not only physically captive, but mentally as well. And we see the psyche of the spider as well: captivated in a different way with her prey. Appreciating the value of the prey, understanding the pain of capture, but a willingness to devour anyway. A captivating circle. Spider and prey. Both captive to who they are. Both suffering in their own way and powerless to change.

A wonderful poem that was greatly enjoyed. High marks!

Best regards,

Rick

[Flowrite]

Captured without the fear in being devoured.

[Danomaly1983]

Yikes, Black Widows can be a menace, both concerning the spider and the human counterpart. Many spiders do have the habit of eating the male after he has impregnanted her, and I believe the same kind of devouring (at least figuratively) can occur among people too. I particularly like the phrase "sorry my love for the tangled up mess", as if the spider/woman tries to apologize or explain why she needs to do this. Excellently evocative, Muse :)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Interesting concept...here in the lines...Of course...I was struck by the title...a black widow eats her mate after mating to give her the nutrients to prepare for birth...but you add your own lines in this one...and give us a vindictive verse here...

[Jessica Gillitzer]

sweet jesus, this is so passionate and wrap you up in your own head, holy cow. oh and the fate to face portion in the end is perfect. i'm Lovin It!
< 3 Jessie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, this works...the cannibalistic idea...

i am not too fond of the different colored font...don't think it is needed to get effect, the words themselves draw enough attention to the theme.

i like the tangled up mess idea mixed with the last two lines...

i'm sorry i am like this, but i am going to eat you anyway.

[Muse]

I thought the least she could do was apologize.

[DoNt LoSe YoUrSeLf]

Wow...instantly with the title, I imagined the spider and how it looked. This was a very good and different description of how that spider is and how it acts. Eating it's mate after capturing them, making love to them. Seeing as that no matter what, once caught under her spell, there is no way out. Wonderful and breathtaking...loved every line!

[N!LoC]

can u please tell me exactly what inspired u to write this??? i think i have an idea.. but i just want to be certain!!!

[Muse]

Inspired by how "females" are portrayed to be cannibalstic by nature. So I wanted to put my own creative "spin" on things. :)

[Alice Locke]

I love how this extremely resonant, relevant metaphor of a poem with so much symbolism and great emphasis with color and bolded words. Wow. Just... wow.