Forcasting Rain...........................

Forcasting Rain...........................

A Poem by Muse

 
Hold my umbrella, keep
their words off my head
protect me
from this
cold
hard
acidic rain
as the ridicule falls
it drowns me
with arthritic pain.
 
Can I stand behind you
to hide my face
I cannot show them my light
they might blow it out
making my day 
a darker night.
 
Speak for me please
my mouth cannot open
but I hear their whispers
every word
seams to shrink me smaller
pull me back up
I need your help
to stand a little taller.

© 2014 Muse


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This is an extraordinary write, very deep and personal...someplace in time I think we've all visited at one time or another. We become numb to if we're lucky, then there are those currents of despair that rain upon our soul so wounding. Captivating read.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Yes but first it drives us insane! ;-)
Muse

11 Years Ago

I have underestimated the emotional scars..my gawd...after conversing with you briefly..I had to sit.. read more
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

Sorry, didn't mean to open old wounds. xo



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We never know how our words will be read by others. I read this poem very personally. I dread ridicule. I listen to my voice on a tape recorder and think 'they will laugh.' This line also resonates with me, 'I cannot show them my light' for precisely the reason you describe, 'they might blow it out.' Of course there comes a point when -- to be true to our creativity -- we have to take the risk and face the prospect of rejection and 'a darker night.' Perhaps, perhaps... Perhaps once we have been rejected and spent time in said 'darker night' we might emerge as the real article, diamond like, rock solid, sure. But there is pain in all this. Again 'speak for me please' resonates also because I can't get my voice to adequately reflect the words I write, in part because of some fear holding me back, the fear of rejection that you describe here. Perhaps there is a companion poem to this one, 'Forecasting Sun...' in which some kind of mad confidence wins the day my not caring what anyone else thinks. Perhaps not to care is what we creative folk need free ourselves from the fear of rejection, and only then can we realise our abilitiess whatever they may be. Your lines made me think they did.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"to stand a little taller"...
Excellent write.. I too can hear the whispers.. every word..xx

Posted 13 Years Ago


'I need your help to stand a little taller' ---> wow, I think everyone has needed that helping hand before. It is easy to say that self-esteem comes from within, but without that magic umbrella shielding you from those words and that ridicule. This is a powerful piece about a topic that is close to my heart. Well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like the artwork and the poem. You create a interesting situation in this poem.
"Speak for me please
my mouth cannot open
but I hear their whispers
every word "
Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


Seams should be "seems" I think, Other than that
a splendidly written piece.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Never fun drowning in other peoples ridicule or when your arm gets tired holding up the umbrella when its pouring. Always nice to have someone hold it up. =) Beautiful

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wonderfully written, an amazing piece of writing. Well done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


keep their words off my head and away from my heart. Please don't let their darkness near my light......beautiful piece!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love this Muse... I can completly relate. xoxo

Posted 13 Years Ago


I absolutely love this Muse. A beautiful way of expressing fears to a lover perhaps...excellent work.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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