Just an aftertaste....................

You stopped me at the first hello, an

 

older and charming handsome fellow

 

we quickly went from friends to lovers

 

I began to slaver for something more

 

I wanted to extinguish you, tasting

 

your salty skin, igniting a craving within

 

I need more to satisfy this palate, your

 

smell of blood sweet like punch, so I

 

pursue my first innocent lick and bite

 

only to get you stuck between my teeth

 

breaking fingers and splintering bones

 

I try to savor your affection in my mouth, but

 

what was once a confection has turned bitter

 

instead I had to swallow you down whole

 

bloated now from the weight of your soul.

Author's Note

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Well slap my a*s call me Charlie and tell me to see Wonka bars. The start gave me the impression the end would not be as harsh. But I loved it, the entire flow could have been someone's thoughts when lying in bed and having the ever important moment of clarity.

[Priscilla Sayers]

fabulous! Darkly sensual and enticing.... Delicious!

Excellent and dramatic way of expressing things and all changing thoughts in a raw way, full of lust and anger, For me with your words you have just painted a splendid instinctively painting~

[Black Swan Poetry]

very powerful and it builds to a great ending...

[Wildfleour]

A very potent image of how another can seduce our very being.

[Hotwater]

Some of everything in there, especially the anger part. Dirty and dark and no sugar.
*bird*

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Wow! So intriguing...I read this twice! I'm enthralled in this write...delicious, yet morbid...to pull this off you have to be a genius!... and that my friend, you are! Genius!

[Aidz]

Sweeeeettttt.... and a sweet seductive aftertaste it is

[Kyle]

Whoa!!!

I wasnt expecting THAT! That was actually delightful in a way....kind of!

[Mary Fioratti]

It seems in this poem - as much as you have it from him - it is not enough. You want more and more...like a possession of the body and soul, you want him totally yours... with a hungry feeling of have it all...
Powerful. Strong. Unique.
*Mary*

[Amplyyours]

Is this a cautionary tale of about getting what you want and it being not what you expected it to be?

You have talent and it is worked beautiful in this poem.