Just an aftertaste....................

You stopped me at the first hello, an

 

older and charming handsome fellow

 

we quickly went from friends to lovers

 

I began to slaver for something more

 

I wanted to extinguish you, tasting

 

your salty skin, igniting a craving within

 

I need more to satisfy this palate, your

 

smell of blood sweet like punch, so I

 

pursue my first innocent lick and bite

 

only to get you stuck between my teeth

 

breaking fingers and splintering bones

 

I try to savor your affection in my mouth, but

 

what was once a confection has turned bitter

 

instead I had to swallow you down whole

 

bloated now from the weight of your soul.

Author's Note

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Well slap my a*s call me Charlie and tell me to see Wonka bars. The start gave me the impression the end would not be as harsh. But I loved it, the entire flow could have been someone's thoughts when lying in bed and having the ever important moment of clarity.

[Reaching for the clouds]

Intense and powerful overall! And yet....somehow this well describes the strong feelings and cravings we have for a new love....

[UnderCompulsion]

Love this poem!It's so powerful!Great work! :D

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this doesnt finish quite how I expected it too..which isn't a bad thing..it's a vampire poem from a interesting angle..or is it an powerful metaphor..either way...a remarkable piece of writing

[Michael X]

You have poetry in your soul, I love this dark style, it is so vivid and mind blowing, Great work!

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

very intriguing and a bit morbid I loved it especially the last line. I think if you changed the structure it would stand out more but that's just me lol

[EMF]

you know, hit me on the head with a hammer...no....second thoughts, please don't. It's been done and it hurts. But according to memory, it has less impact than this. So damn powerful and so damn good. So that's why I keep coming back to it. A slave to your writing. A junkie for the good stuff. Just keep dealing and we'll be fine.
Now just a word to you tonkers who quickly scan the reviews to decide what to write before you do your review. Hate you to make up your own minds...I am not a junkie. Muse is not a dealer. That was what was called a metaphor. Just read the poem. Your world will truly be a better place for it

[Sarah Redigan]

delicious ... till the very last bite ...

[Emily Rae]

you captured a great blend of sensuality and morbidity in this piece, very powerful

[Laughing-Bear]

My Dear Writing Friend,
A thought-provoking write with an ending I had not expected. Well written and unique.

Blessings, Laughing-Bear