Just an aftertaste....................

Just an aftertaste....................

A Poem by Muse

You stopped me at the first hello, an
 
older and charming handsome fellow
 
we quickly went from friends to lovers
 
I began to slaver for something more
 
I wanted to extinguish you, tasting
 
your salty skin, igniting a craving within
 
I need more to satisfy this palate, your
 
smell of blood sweet like punch, so I
 
pursue my first innocent lick and bite
 
only to get you stuck between my teeth
 
breaking fingers and splintering bones
 
I try to savor your affection in my mouth, but
 
what was once a confection has turned bitter
 
instead I had to swallow you down whole
 
bloated now from the weight of your soul.

© 2014 Muse


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Well slap my a*s call me Charlie and tell me to see Wonka bars. The start gave me the impression the end would not be as harsh. But I loved it, the entire flow could have been someone's thoughts when lying in bed and having the ever important moment of clarity.

Posted 12 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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this was amazing

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

To wallow in sensual favor as words will fly you to the moon

Posted 12 Years Ago


a revisit... thoughts still echo within

Posted 12 Years Ago


Okay...reading this the second time, three months later, has a whole new meaning... I think I know this guy? lol

I totally love this!! Damn this is good! No...It's better than good, it's great! And even better the second time around. Sheer Perfection!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

oooooh WOW!! LOVE! LOVE! LOVE! your play on words here!! def. talent at its best!! and the "weight of your soul..." damn that is one hell of a line in itself!! AWESOME WRITE!!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Magnificent metaphors! This is sweet~ I adore it - bloated by the wieght of your soul.....great line Muse.. A + skills
So unique..

Chloe











































































Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, all I could picture was a snake, trying to be frisky but having to devour it's lover and wishing it hadn't. Random, huh? But I thought your poem was excellent, with a deeper meaning than I've perhaps uncovered. I too will savour going back and reading this again and again. =)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a way to communicate the overwhelming feeling of desire, a very petrifying yet enjoyable feeling that comes and goes so easily to some. You made it into a living thing...what an enjoyable read.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This started out so light and airy...
your words splashed vivid black/grey/sepia toned images into my mind, all senses involved.
Wow! I might lose some sleep tonight...
Outstanding write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A powerful write with a strong sense of will, excellent write:-)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 22, 2011
Last Updated on June 8, 2014
Tags: Love, anger, poem, poetry, writing, revenge, hate, lust, life, food

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