Just an aftertaste....................

You stopped me at the first hello, an

 

older and charming handsome fellow

 

we quickly went from friends to lovers

 

I began to slaver for something more

 

I wanted to extinguish you, tasting

 

your salty skin, igniting a craving within

 

I need more to satisfy this palate, your

 

smell of blood sweet like punch, so I

 

pursue my first innocent lick and bite

 

only to get you stuck between my teeth

 

breaking fingers and splintering bones

 

I try to savor your affection in my mouth, but

 

what was once a confection has turned bitter

 

instead I had to swallow you down whole

 

bloated now from the weight of your soul.

Author's Note

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Well slap my a*s call me Charlie and tell me to see Wonka bars. The start gave me the impression the end would not be as harsh. But I loved it, the entire flow could have been someone's thoughts when lying in bed and having the ever important moment of clarity.

[Bare trees]

Only you could write something like this. A vamp has needs and blood is one of them. An insatiable appetite is one thing but this is something else entirely. Always an interesting read from you muse, always.

[Stacey Watts]

Wow very well written. A very nice and different approach to the Vampire story. Very fresh. Well done.

[Priscilla Sayers]

Stunning. I feel this poem, it screams and pulses through my veins and my already laden heart. Thank you my friend for this wonderful piece.

[Hayley]

"only to get you stuck between my teeth

breaking fingers and splintering bones

I try to savor your affection in my mouth, but

what was once a confection has turned bitter

instead I had to swallow you down whole

bloated now from the weight of your soul."

Riveting piece! Your wordage is so unique and quotable. Always a fan!

[The Simple Minded Poet]

Imagery is powerful!
Love it

[Mike]

i can taste the salt hahaha great poem as usual

[dontwakeme]

Wow, This is ...i don't even know. Good job, left me literally speechless.

[Sleeping Maiden]

oh wow.. damn...

this is amazing... wonderful! Just wonderful! I love it.