Just an aftertaste....................

You stopped me at the first hello, an

 

older and charming handsome fellow

 

we quickly went from friends to lovers

 

I began to slaver for something more

 

I wanted to extinguish you, tasting

 

your salty skin, igniting a craving within

 

I need more to satisfy this palate, your

 

smell of blood sweet like punch, so I

 

pursue my first innocent lick and bite

 

only to get you stuck between my teeth

 

breaking fingers and splintering bones

 

I try to savor your affection in my mouth, but

 

what was once a confection has turned bitter

 

instead I had to swallow you down whole

 

bloated now from the weight of your soul.

Author's Note

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

Well slap my a*s call me Charlie and tell me to see Wonka bars. The start gave me the impression the end would not be as harsh. But I loved it, the entire flow could have been someone's thoughts when lying in bed and having the ever important moment of clarity.

[Tate Morgan]

Ah that was a great work .Men we are definitely the weaker sex lol

[Art Sun]

one could grasp this as two view points of different relationships...though it does have that emotional tie of the enveloping and overpowering emotion that relations can become...nice

[Chris]

...many views... comments...

liking - to owning - to obsessing - a touch of jealousy - the feel of chains and locked doors, forever being kept away from anything-one else...

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Its amazing how I read your work and the imagery is so vivid that I almost feel violated. You have such a powerful way of imposing your will through your words.
This was a thrill! I loved it.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Love the word choice you used, excellent read!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Bitter as wine to the unpractised palate, well done

[Clay Feet]

After five or six readings I continue to find more depth in this piece, savored sweetness transformed to a sour swallow.

Excellent imagery, Muse.

[Dexter Killian]

wow, almost erotic, almost not


Quite amazing

85/100

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

This imagery is brilliant, the beauty of this is such a mouth full of seduction and longing.