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He watches

through a pane

of dirty glass

like you and I

he's had a future

he's had a past

time for him

is almost spent

calloused hands 

like old cement

delicate fallibility 

impales his skin

ghost like stupor

invested in silence

quiet and guarded

bearded with thoughts

secrets antiqued within

waiting patiently now

for his hour to come

visual modality blurred

hearing obscured

deliberate and unmeasured

this process of decay

frail like lead paint

 

                    slowly peeling,

 

                                    chipping away................

 

 

Reviews

[EMF]

An incredible piece. Compelling. You have created a perfect character study in just a few lines. The depth of insight, coupled with a love of your subject matter generate a power and intensity, while you also imbed a tendrness and understanding that is incomparible. Class work Lady. Nice to get the time to read and reread. You have left me images that will be a long time peeling.

[Seshat Nidaba]

I love this, this topic is very close to my heart. Well penned.

[kevluvtory]

A gentle rhythm within which to study the grace and charm within the old man himself a long lost poetic vibe now awaiting the final stanza

[light and ashes]

So gorgeous tis he way that you described this old man.."bearded with thoughts secrets antiqued within waiting patiently now for his hour to come visual modality blurred hearing obscured deliberate and unmeasured this process of decay frail like lead pain slowly peeling, chipping away........." Fantastic!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

secrets antiqued within waiting patiently now for his hour to come......life has been lived and is reflected in his eyes and in every heartbeat......beautiful poem of aging......

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

"Where there is snow on the mountain there is fire in the hearth"...Enjoyed reading your thoughts about the picture..Very astute and creative work..Sunflower

[S.J. Wist]

Perfect picture for the imagery in this. Keep up the good work!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A touching and highly descriptive piece, well done, good read.

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

Muse this is an excellent poem. I love the way you have portrayed his story. And the ending it just makes it all so final. Love it xoxo

[TJ]

You never fail to impress me, Muse. An amazing piece. An old man waiting for his final days looking out the window, like he looks over his life.
Very good! Structure, flow, presentation.

Amazing