non compos mentis

non compos mentis

that's right my mind is not right

growing madder by the week

it's the psychotic pulse that I seek

sometimes I want to cut in deep

hysterical chanting in my ear

even when you speak sincere

a deranged schizophrenic fit

I see not one in the mirror

but two, seven, and four

my reflections show me horror

demented voices and words

hell yes !

I'm insane in the membrane

not saying I like it

but I'm done trying to fight it

depression and bitterness is sweet

no longer do I see it as personal defeat

demonic whispers inspire my art

 insanity and I

will never depart!

Reviews

[Neville]

'And so say all of us'

Whether you write on this particular subject from true personal experience Muse, or as a result of some un-natural insight and gift is unimportant ' non compos mentis' provides those that take a few moments out to savour it "and by 'it' I mean some of the less obvious or in your face messages this work either deliberately or inadvertently contains . There, having now got that off my chest, I must only add that I thoroughly enjoyed this little excursion into madness... All Good Things, N

[Dayran]

Not true. The natural state of man is to discover his boundless, everlasting nature. To discover it is the key. Someone handing it to you is not yours.

[Jeremy Baker]

I wonder how you could describe me so well?! Excellent writing!

[Chris]

Thiss is soooooooooooooo right...

Chuckling here.
Chris

[Legacy]

Muse,

non compos mentis - insane (not of sound mind).

Unmitigated! You let it all out here... engaging verbal battles (with ones self) is a lost art of unspoken thoughts. Your speaking these politically incorrect ideologies shall rightfully cause disruption in the system. (WE ALL FEEL THIS WAY)!!!!

Your pace was fast, fitting to the thoughts; Your non compos mentis was perfect; Your timing didn't miss a single beat.

Seal it, stamp it and throw it in the mail box... this poem is a message to all afraid to speak the truth.

Have a wonderful day,

Legacy

[Dream Weaver]

O how I enjoy deranged works of art...Well done...

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

Truely brilliant, psychologically pulsing with imagery and insainty; yet it remains sane. Great job!

[Rick Puetter]

Hi Muse!

Humm...of unsound mind, but then crossed out. Does this mean "only fooling..."?

Your writing is excellent. Greatly enjoyed. There is a sophistication here that is not typical of the WC. I am enjoying your work. Welcome to the WC, my friend!

"I see not one in the mirror
but two, seven, and four"

Yep! This is right! The order of numbers is not part of it and correct order speaks of rationality. Nice touch.

"I'm insane in the membrane
not saying I like it
but I'm done trying to fight it"

Yes, this is probably how it is. Nice insight.

Pretty much there's nothing I would change with this poem. Just wonderful to read.

Greatly enjoyed. High marks again.

Best regards,

Rick

[Allen Smuckler]

Excellent write Muse..truly
I loved the form, style, and yes, even the darkness...and the way you brought it to light....
just not crazy about insanity..hopefully it's just a write...or one of those days.
allen
then again..perhaps I missed the point.....after reading it for a third time...I suddenly see a different message....:)

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

Dark, depressing, and oddly awesome. Nice word choice!

[*~DreamDeamon~*]

Haha. that makes me laugh. I love dark stuff. Exceptional work here i really like it! Fantastic write!