Blinded

Just like the sun,

your smiles so bright.

Find me;

illuminate my night.

 

Overwhelmed I am,

Just a shadow; no touch.

This empty void,

at times, is just too much.

 

Like the sun,

penetrate me with life.

Rescue me;

from the internal hate,

this strife.

 

Blinded by my darkness!

 

Blinded by my

evil deeds!

 

Blinded by my

sinful needs!

 

Like the sun,

your smiles so bright.

Cure my darkness,

blind me;

with your light!

Reviews

[Neville]

Well I could not put it better myself ---- I mean the positive views and opinions of so many of my reviewing predecessors ... I love your "Blinded by my
evil deeds!

Blinded by my
sinful needs!

Crammed full and overflowing with subliminally erotic messages that tantalise and tease. A real treat at breakfast time. Shame that I have to set off for the gym, but I will be back. AGT's N

[...]

. a truly beautiful piece of writing ... the title and the way these words are woven around it ... make for a ravishing read ...

[Inyourshadow]

Overwhelmed I am
just a shadow, no touch~

I love the idea of being likened to a shadow but do not shadows touch a
us all, in childhood they scare us and in adulthood reveiw us lol. Seriously I love the need that flows softly throughout your piece, may light always find you and may you never suffer the darkness alone. Keep em' coming

[Antonio Valentino]

"Like the sun,
penetrate me with life.
Rescue me;
from the internal hate,
this strife"

"Blinded by my
sinful needs!
Like the sun,
your smiles so bright.
Cure my darkness,
blind me;
with your light!"

I am at a lost trying to describe how beautiful the poetry i have read of your's is..

.. for once.. it is one kind of lost, i actually enjoy being..

:)

[joshua deathdealer]

Great structure and awesome read. Excellent work Muse!!

[Stammers]

Hmm, the layout with picture and the comittment to the idea of this really drew me in. I think the rhyme may perhaps restrict it - tut tut of me to be critical but it is a feedback website - I'd love to see this concept in a different format. As it stands though, for the form this was written for, it's very pretty and will appeal to many.

[Becky C Strukamp]

Love the structure of this poem. You can feel the gentleness of a touch, the warmth of the sun, the imagery brings this poem to life. Excellent write.

[Liza]

the play on extremes of emotions are intense in their request; Cure my darkness, blind me...interesting angle! Blind me with your light! scortching hot! i love it!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Wow, you have this feminine passionate poetry thing down to an art. I'm serious and every one I have read by you makes me want more. I love work like this.

[Lily Mae]

I have felt this and know it well and so have wished for the same things.. You have penned it with perfection:)xx

[Coyote Poetry]

The words are beautiful. I like how you described the desire of the poem.
"Like the sun,
penetrate me with life.
Rescue me;
from the internal hate,
this strife."
A strong ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote